Is this a good intro ?

Question

The inspiration was from a dream (that was last night) that was similar with a few added details, how do you like it? Is it a good intro? If I wanted to write some stuff that actually could happen in real life, what else could I write?

http://groups.msn.com/RocLaFamiliaFanFiction/beyonce.msnw?action=get_message&mview=0&ID_Message=12252&LastModified=4675613777910142969
(two songs that deal with the points of view of the two main charaters and then the intro)

Answer 1

Awesome! amazing! cool! radically tubular woo-man!!! ya!