Which sounds better for a poem about my partner (not supposed to say who it is)?

Question

1)My Partner:
Your about to read a poem,
About a friend I know
Unfortunatley I cannot tell who this person is
So be sure to read my poem real slow.
My partner likes coke,
And loves to make jokes.
She adores converse shoes,
But she hates the blues.
She isn’t a baby she isn’t into toys,
But nowadays she is, however, more into boys.
She is from sri lanka and has lovely black hair,
And who could of guessed, this poem was done by Claire.

OR

2)My partner
I have a partner who’s name I cannot tell,
If I told you, you’d think of me as a rebel.
My partner likes coke,
And loves to make jokes.
She adores converse shoes,
But she hates the blues.
She isn’t a baby she isn’t into toys,
But nowadays she is, however, more into boys.
She is from sri lanka and has lovely black hair,
And who could of guessed, this poem was done by Claire.

ya, my name is claire. I wouldn't have put it if it weren't! Does the rebel thing sound good or bad? Thats my only concern..

Answer 1

The first one sounds better.

Answer 2

n 2

Answer 3

I like the second poem better. It flows a little nice than the first one.

Answer 4

#2. But are u Claire? Who is Claire?

Answer 5

Wow! Those are really long poems. I didn't read them though, but I would go with the longer one because it shows how much you care.

Answer 6

The second one.... is she kicking you to the curb in favor of boys?

Answer 7

I'd say the first one.

Answer 8

yeah, the 2nd one is better