i need help with this para..is it good or do i need to make some changes?

Question

To win ratification the constitution required approval of 9 of the 13 states. Citizens were divided and broke off into two groups. They were the Federalists and Anti-federalists. Federalists were a group of people who favored ratification of the constitution and supported a strong national government that would be able to ensure a strong currency and protect property rights. While Anti-federalists were a group of people who feared a powerful national government, so they offered three objections to the Constitution. Additionally they pointed to the election procedures outlined in the Constitution as proof that the new national government was undemocratic. Which lead us to the Federalists Papers, which were the series of eighty-five articles written by the supporters of the Constitution in 1788, which argued for the ratification of the United States. Moreover, the papers serve as a primary source for interpretation of the Constitution, as they outline the philosophy and motivation of the proposed system of government. There was a ratification struggle because of the individual rights because unlike many states, the US constitution did not contain the Bill of rights. This omission outraged the Antifederalists, some of whom refused to support ratification. Furthermore, several states agreed to ratify the Constitution only if individual rights were guaranteed in a bill of right.

Answer 1

Changes are needed. I would put a comma after "ratification," but it is one of those optional/iffy things. "Constitution" should be capitalized. Spell out "9." (The basic rule is spell out ten and below, but 11 and above can be in numbers.) Other suggested changes are below:

To win ratification, the United States Constitution required approval of nine of the 13 states. Citizens were divided and broke off into two groups: the Federalists and the Anti-federalists. The Federalists favored ratification of the Constitution and supported a strong national government able to ensure a strong currency and protect property rights. Anti-federalists feared a powerful national government, so they offered three objections to the Constitution. (WHAT WERE THOSE THREE OBJECTIONS? LISTING THEM WOULD STRENGTHEN YOUR PARAGRAPH.) Additionally, they believed that the election procedures outlined in the Constitution proved that the new national government was undemocratic. This difference of opinion lead to the Federalists Papers, which were a series of eighty-five articles that argued for the ratification of the Constitution. The supporters of the Constitution wrote them in 1788. Moreover, the papers served as a primary source for interpretation of the Constitution, as they outlined the philosophy and motivation of the proposed system of government. There was a ratification struggle because unlike many states, the U. S. Constitution did not contain language to guarantee individual rights. This omission outraged the Anti-federalists, some of whom refused to support ratification. Furthermore, several states agreed to ratify the Constitution only if individual rights were guaranteed in a Bill of Rights.

Answer 2

First I find the description of Federalists a little to long. Read it out loud and you will see what I mean. Also, the part where you write " which lead us to the Federalist Papers...." it should be LEADS, not lead. then, only write "which were the series....." if these papers no longer exist..if they still exist write "are" not were. After you state, "...supporters of the Constiution in 1788" put "that" and not "which" because you already wrote "which" in the same sentence. Then you go on about "...There was a ratification struggle because..." then you say " because" again after a few words. Dont do that. The first because should change to"There was a ratification struggle due to the individual rights because, unlike many states....." The rest is fine. Hope this helped!!!