Do you like my free verse poem "Footprints"?

Question

Once I came across an old path
Unkown by so many
All I could see were lone footprints
On this road taken by so few
As I walked along I came across a fork
At one end was a wall
And at the other stood you
And although the path I did not know
It felt as if every step was not brand-new
As I approached what I thought was you
And reached out for your guidence
You dissappeared before my very sight
At this momment I reconized
This path I know all to well
This old untaken path
Was my past and my Present Life
So I walked past where you had stood
I just happened to look down
I saw the unremarkable, I saw your footprints but no you
So I keep on moving
But whenever I turn back
I still expect to see
What is not and could never be

SERIOUSLY? I think thats a big accomplishment for something written by a 13 year old in 5 minutes!

Well I made this poem up by myself, I don't steal others work.

Answer 1

nicely done!

I was arround that age when I wrote my "best" poetry. None of mine was half as good as your though.

Keep up the excellent work :)

Answer 2

interior the music, "the sea," sung in French, there's a couplet. i've got translated it actually; it does not exist interior the English version: "however the sea erases from the sand the footsteps of disunited fans." you have stayed above the intense water mark with this poem.

Answer 3

Yup, it's good. I like the last line.

Answer 4

Good, you have potential.

I am your fan already.

I write poems too.

Answer 5

it's nice..nearly resembles a poem about unrequited love..
nearly..
nicely done though :)

Answer 6

yes very deep and moving

Answer 7

i love it! it madde me cry in a good way