What do you think of my poems?

Question

The first is called "A FriendShip Promise"
With Tragedies
I'll help you cope
If you in DispaIR
I'll give you hope

Your Are my friend
And I have Faith
If you are ever alone
I will give you a home

And when I die
I'll watch over you
I'll be your Angel
Thats exactly what I will do

But all I can give you
Are Priceless Memories
And Crouage
That will see you through

This I Promise
To You
From now and forever
A friendship that is true

"Shoes shoes!"
Shoes shoes they're everywhere!
I love them more then punk rock hair
They clutter my room and my floor
Shoes shoes give me more!

All the different types
Tennis Flats
Boots & Platts
What a hype

So much fun to tie
I love them more then the square root of Pi!
An addiction that can't hurt you
Unless you trip and fall

Some make you short
Some make you tall
Just put them on
You'll have a ball!

Their natural predators are stinky feet
Their natural habitat is at the mall
(Cont..)

Good shoes are hard to beat
Unless your wallet cannot meet

Got new shoes no one to call
and no one to show?
Even those cute ones with the bow?
Heres a suggestion show them and strut them in a busy hall
SHOE SHOES! I WISH I HAD THEM ALL!

"Dear Dad you are getting old"

Congrats you are 49 and over the hilll
Better get to work on writing you will
Your so old its not even funny'
But we both know your still alive and kicking hunny!
Time to put you in a retirement home
Don't worry we'll take care of the bill!
Cause you are old and over the hill!

Answer 1

I like your poems! I think the rhythm is off a little bit sometimes, but overall, yeah. I especially like the Over The Hill One. Keep it up!

Answer 2

Good, shows a lot of immagination and creativity.

Answer 3

Not bad, but you misspelled dispair.

Answer 4

wow