I'm 11 years old and I was wondering if you like it
Friends
Doing nails and fixing hair,
Staying up late playing truth or dare.
Lots of laughs and little games,
Inside jokes and fun nicknames.
Talking on the phone all day long,
Always making sure nothings wrong.
Calling you up in the middle of the night,
Just to see if everythings all right.
Discussing crushes left and right,
Never getting in a fight.
Starting gossip here and there.
Buying clothes for you to share.
Sleepovers, never slept.
Lot's of secrets always kept.
Wishing days would never end,
The definition of a friend.
2007-03-08 14:04:05 · 23 answers · asked by Katie S 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
the staying up late should just be staying up....too many syllables
2007-03-08 14:14:40 · update #1
are you kidding!? I'm only ten and i can never write a poem that good at school you would probably be in my school magazine keep on doing poetry and you'll be a great writer i loved it
2007-03-08 14:14:05 · answer #1 · answered by andrea l 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
For an eleven year old I think it is very good. I have a 14 year old daughter that is also very talented and an 11 year old that is just beginning to show interest in writing. It is a beginning talent. With the next years of your schooling, you will learn to develop this skill more precisely. Keep up the good work and do not let anyone tell you differently. You do have a talent, now it just has to be developed. Good luck!
2007-03-08 22:22:20 · answer #2 · answered by Terri 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow - your talented for an 11 year old. Thats a fantastic poem!. Keep writing ok.
2007-03-08 22:07:15 · answer #3 · answered by Puss in Boots 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
WOW you are only 11 this is great! I am a member of a writing site where we read and review [poetry and stories etc... You should check it out
Starting as young as you are I see great potential WRITE ON!!!! Look me up- DINY
2007-03-08 22:57:57 · answer #4 · answered by admiredi 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You are a very clever girl! And guess what, your poem captures exactly what 11 year olds should be doing.
Well Done sweety!
2007-03-08 22:08:04 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Given your age, I must observe you have excellent choice of words, the ideas and concern are marvelously expressed. Surely, sweetie you've got wonderful imagination. . . . lucid and candid. Excellent. Congrats!!
2007-03-09 06:51:02 · answer #6 · answered by ari-pup 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I loved it! That's my definition of a friend too at your age. Great job!
2007-03-08 22:08:07 · answer #7 · answered by Lynn 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nice! it has good rythym. Read your peotry out loud and feel how it flows. Keep up the good work!
2007-03-08 22:07:44 · answer #8 · answered by maryquast 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's a very nice simple poem for your age.
2007-03-08 22:08:49 · answer #9 · answered by JOhNe=mc² 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It was really nice.You are very talented. Keep up the good work.
2007-03-08 22:52:50 · answer #10 · answered by Drea 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋