How should I write this part of my Resume?

Question

I am trying to write my objective, which sentence is correct?

To obtain a position in which I help XXX succeed, as I become an increasingly productive supply chain management professional.

or...

To obtain a position in which I help XXX succeed as I become an increasingly productive supply chain management professional.

Also, is this a good objective statement?

Answer 1

I would type it as follows:

To obtain a position in which I help XXX succeed and become and increasingly productive supply chain management professional.

Answer 2

I think you've got a good gist going on there. Personally I would go with an 'and' instead of 'as I' and forget the comma as you're really making two statements there.
Mine would read something like:
'To obtain a position in which I'm an integral part of the success of XXX and to become an increasingly productive supply chain management professional"

Answer 3

objective statements should be, well...objective which means no first person (I, me, my)

using first-person literally makes the statement subjective--not objective.

How about: "To obtain a position that provides the opportunity to become an increasingly..... within a (pick a good thing about XXX) company"

Say something good about the organization like a well-established, successful, fast-growing, reputable, etc. but don't say you want to "help them suceed" sounds overbearing and don't mention them by name.

Example: to obtain a position with a "well-established" manufacturer

Answer 4

It sounds okay, but I would remove the company name:

A position as a supply chain management professional.

Answer 5

i believe objective statements are obsolete and you don't need one. i write resumes for people.

btw the two sentences are identical.