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its journalistic style and i am trying to edit out (for example) passive voive, and i am trying get edit grammer, spelling, etc.



Supporters of the operating levy for the Lakewood Falls School District wore bright yellow T-shirts reading “PASS: Parents Advocating School Support,” but there faces were somber as election results came in Tuesday night.
According to complete but unofficial results, Issue 5, an emergency operating levy, was defeated by a vote of 2,239 (for) and 2,724 (against) the measure. School officials said an additional $3,200,000 would have been raised annually by the 7.9 million dollar levy.
The School Board will discuss options during their meeting on Thursday, said school board president Clara Synfelder.
“We’ll decide when to put the levy back on the ballot,” she said. “Waiting for the state to fix school funding is just wasting time.”
Synfelder said she is encouraged since the levy lost by less than 500 votes Tuesday, while an 8.5-mill levy lost by over 1,500 votes six months ago.
The district’s teachers plan to work with the parent’s group to insure the levy passes next time, said Andrea Arconti, president of the Lakewood Falls Education Association and a teacher at Mann Middle School.
“This levy effects our community, when it doesn’t pass, property values go down,” she said.
If Tuesday’s levee had passed the owner a $140,000 home would have been charged an extra $332 a year in property taxes, according to School District Secretary Treasurer Rosalyn Calhoun.
Superintendent Mark Quail said that if an operating levy doesn’t pass before the next school year, it will necessitate significant cuts and reductions in scholastic and athletic programs for Lakewood Falls schools. The school district will consider cutting back bussing to the state minimum, to reduce janitorial and support staff, eliminating elementary school music teachers, and implementing “pay-to-play” fees for atheletes, he said.
The district is comprised of 21 precincts. The levy failed in 14 precincts Tuesday, including all of those in the southeast section of the city near McCoy Industries, where more than 400 workers have been laid off in the past year.

2007-03-08 01:59:12 · 2 answers · asked by casara needs help 1 in News & Events Media & Journalism

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Supporters of the operating levy for the Lakewood Falls School District wore bright yellow T-shirts reading “PASS: Parents Advocating School Support,” but their faces were somber as the election results came in Tuesday night.

According to complete but unofficial results, Issue 5, an emergency operating levy, was defeated with a 2,724 votes against the measure, compared to the 2,239 votes cast in Issue 5's favor.

School officials said an additional $3,200,000 would have been raised annually by the 7.9 million dollar levy.

The School Board will discuss further options during their meeting on Thursday, DATE, according to school board president Clara Synfelder.

“We’ll decide when to put the levy back on the ballot,” she said. “Waiting for the state to fix school funding is just wasting time.”

Synfelder said she is encouraged since the levy lost by less than 500 votes Tuesday, while an 8.5 million dollar levy lost by over 1,500 votes six months ago.

The district’s teachers plan to work with the parent’s group to ensure the levy passes next time, said Andrea Arconti, president of the Lakewood Falls Education Association and a teacher at Mann Middle School.

“This levy effects our community," Arconti said, "When it doesn’t pass, property values go down."

If Tuesday’s levee had passed, the owner of a $140,000 home would have been charged an extra $332 a year in property taxes, according to School District Secretary Treasurer Rosalyn Calhoun.

Superintendent Mark Quail said that if an operating levy doesn’t pass before the next school year, it will necessitate significant cuts and reductions in scholastic and athletic programs for Lakewood Falls schools. The school district will consider cutting back bussing to the state minimum, to reduce janitorial and support staff, eliminating elementary school music teachers, and implementing “pay-to-play” fees for atheletes, he said.

The district is comprised of 21 precincts. The levy failed in 14 precincts Tuesday, including all of those in the southeast section of the city near McCoy Industries, where more than 400 workers have been laid off in the past year.

2007-03-08 02:56:12 · answer #1 · answered by ? 3 · 1 0

What is your question? Surely you are not asking the professional journalists who read this to edit your school assignment.

2007-03-08 02:37:26 · answer #2 · answered by MyThought 6 · 0 1

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