A buddy of mine is putting finishing touches on this song before he produces it, and I thought some feedback would be nice. His music and songwriting is heavily influenced by Elliot Smith.
"Memento"
thoughts fall down like rain
I wish I knew what’s different
and what’s the same
it’s just like money spent
won’t even matter where it went
we’re here to stay
the sounds eclipse the thought
vibrations lift the wall
a shadow crawls
gone, gone, you kiss it goodbye
today’s perfect truth
tomorrow’s lie
me, my note in my brain
yesterday it stayed there
but it went away
gone for good
didn’t even say
I’m stuck in yesterday
tomorrow’s torn away
I wish I could go back
I wish I could go back
I would go back and change
wave, wave hello
is it something I can’t have?
apparently so
I wish I could go
day filled with blue
a green surrounding you
a yellow for the sun
2007-03-07 09:52:14 · 10 answers · asked by luke 2 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music
thought provoking - i wish i could here the music that goes along with the words
i like the "im stuck in yesterday, tomorrows torn away"
*:)
2007-03-07 09:56:43 · answer #1 · answered by Miss_Sunshine 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like the final lyrics best.
What is a "note in my brain"?
break a leg
2007-03-07 18:16:14 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i love this..it has alot of depth. i think this song will go very far if put in the right hands.
good luck.
2007-03-07 17:57:15 · answer #3 · answered by Just Another Slow Dance. 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its something people would listening to. In other words its worth listening to.
2007-03-07 17:56:45 · answer #4 · answered by Quasha 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I actually like it! I am not sure I would like it if I heard it, but the lyrics are awesome.
2007-03-07 18:02:38 · answer #5 · answered by leahjo_13 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it.. the lyrics flow really nice. I think its great.
2007-03-07 17:55:51 · answer #6 · answered by Mandi Jo 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think that they are too long, but it is a nice and BORING song
2007-03-07 17:55:26 · answer #7 · answered by wonderfulness 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
kinna short for a song (needs a chorus)...but its perty good
2007-03-07 17:59:30 · answer #8 · answered by kfcchickenlegs 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
how nice! i hope he gets his song published so i can hear it!
2007-03-07 18:00:08 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
thats AWSOME!
2007-03-07 17:56:31 · answer #10 · answered by AFI Obsessed Girl 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋