You capture my heart
When I just hear you laugh
And though we are young
You're my missing half
When you're playing with children
And showing them love
You make my heart beat
Like your sent from above
You capture my heart
With your captivating beauty
And inspire me to make
Caring for you my duty
When you're walking, you move
With such style and grace
And I could study all day
Every line of your face
I'll search high and low
Until each other we find
But now for today
You exist in my mind
When we are apart
It's you I will miss
And long once again
To taste your sweet kiss
I'll embrace you so close
Each night and each day
But for now I will search
Till I find you .................Someday
I would like to chat on yahoo IM with any girl who likes my poem (or add me to your buddy list)
2007-03-07 06:47:05 · 28 answers · asked by dwsum41@yahoo.com 2 in Beauty & Style ➔ Makeup
Very nice......
2007-03-07 06:49:27 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
Try to use a meter form when writing poetry, I know this isn't the English section. Also you need to consider the break down of the actual words and syllables in them as well. Try this link to help further your poem writing: http://www.poetryamerica.com/poetrytips.asp
-Was a minor in English literature and this was drilled in my head-
2007-03-07 06:52:13 · answer #2 · answered by Juleette 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nice and beautiful. I love the free form. My only suggestion would be in line 8 it should be you're rather then your. I'd love to exchange poetry sometime. Just IM me. :)
2007-03-07 07:00:12 · answer #3 · answered by grk_tigris 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Ur poem's beautiful. I wish a guy would feel like this about me...in the mean time, I'll just sit and wait. He'll find me, one day.
2007-03-07 06:52:45 · answer #4 · answered by Nikki 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It very sweet and I really like it much If i were a teacher I will give u an A
I wish all guys do that like U!
:-)
2007-03-07 06:56:52 · answer #5 · answered by Jillian H 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it is the main amazing poem ive ever study if that dont soften a females heart then wot will. i might like to fulfill a guy who might write and study poems like that to me on a daily basis. x-x-x-x-x-x-x-x
2016-10-17 12:12:22 · answer #6 · answered by arleta 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I hate poetry and this almost made me cry it was GREAT!!
If you don't mind I think I'll put it in a collections book
2007-03-07 07:42:12 · answer #7 · answered by Crystal Blue 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This poem is hot! I'm a guy but I'm gay so I hope u don't mind.......ur a very talented lady!
2007-03-07 06:57:05 · answer #8 · answered by jtothalofan 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I really love your poem. It is very beautiful.
2007-03-07 07:09:10 · answer #9 · answered by Marenight 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That is a very good poem.
2007-03-07 08:30:31 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
awww. such a sweet poem!
2007-03-07 06:51:47 · answer #11 · answered by dragonflyxfairy 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋