If this sentence is not correct, then how should this sentence be re-written while staying in one sentence?
"To me, the internet search serves only as a plaything-and should generally only be used to descry the supplemental or auxilary, or for the pursuit of irrelevant but entertaining, tangent information."
(Wikipedia is a prime example of this.)
2007-03-07 05:12:00 · 8 answers · asked by naruto u 1 in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
generally only? who says that?
use less words.
2007-03-07 06:01:53 · answer #1 · answered by resistance fighter1 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
'Generally' and 'only' don't mix. Eliminate the pointless one.
'Descry' is awkward in this case. Use a simpler word to lead into supplemental or auxilary.
"or" is used twice within a 3 word span. Confusing.
Fixing the "descry the supplemental or auxilary" group would help immensely.
irrelevant and tangent don't mix either.
Your sending a confusing message made of big words.
Restating this to have more impact would require removing the confusion.
To me, the internet search is just a plaything that I use to entertain myself by pursuing useless and irrelevant trivia when I should utilize it for its wealth of supplemental or auxiliary information.
Or something on that line.
2007-03-07 13:45:11 · answer #2 · answered by ? 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
No your sentence is not correct. :(
There should be no coma between 'me' and 'the', instead of a dash between 'plaything' 'and' you should put your comma.
Take 'generally' or 'only' out. Only means "without others" and 'generally' means "without reference to particular instances or detail" so you are repeating yourself.
Use either 'supplemental' or 'auxiliary'. Auxiliary means 'additional; supplementary'
"To me the internet search serves only as a plaything, and should only be used to descry the supplemental or the pursuit of irrelevant but entertaining tangent information."
2007-03-07 13:40:10 · answer #3 · answered by Catie I 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your sentence is over-wordy. It seems like you are trying to fit every impressive word you know into it, which is actually making it harder to understand. It also seems a little pompous.
2007-03-07 13:20:07 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
Does it matter? The words were read , and understood. You gave a message which was not really a question.
2007-03-07 13:30:29 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
"To me" should be something like "In my opinion"
No dash after "plaything"
"generally only" should be "generally" or "only"
No comma after "entertaining"
2007-03-07 13:16:09 · answer #6 · answered by scruffy 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The sentence, 'Is this sentence grammatically correct', is now spelled correctly.
2007-03-07 13:24:17 · answer #7 · answered by mysticleah 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
no
2007-03-07 13:15:10 · answer #8 · answered by luckylyndy2 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋