Release
Hold tight to my hand through this starless night,
Until the angels soar when dawn has broke.
Putting up with these everlasting fights,
Unknowing, what great war you have invoked.
Trace your footprints back down the path you came.
Hopelessly, you regret their every flaw.
Create a future, now ridden of shame.
Then deny every once forbidden law.
Release the spirits you’ve hidden within.
Fly above with honest angels of light.
Beyond common comprehension of sin,
Slowly discover all you’ve missed in sight.
Cut the chains and begin to break away,
Though memories are to forever stay.
2007-03-06 16:34:41 · 2 answers · asked by Sarah 4 in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
Grammatically, I don't see anything wrong with this poem. It makes sense the way it is.
The only thing I noticed is an inconsistency of where the verses end in periods and commas.
2007-03-06 16:40:55 · answer #1 · answered by x-a-n 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Maybe I'm wrong here, but I don't think there is such a thing as correct grammar in a poem. Anything goes.
2007-03-06 16:44:12 · answer #2 · answered by ? 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋