To those back home
I am gone
yet my memory will go on
kiss the kids I love them so
let them know I had to go
Tell my parents there are no regrets
to those who I fought beside
who came from nation wide
you are all my brothers and sisters
to my bride brush those tears aside
I am here so far yet so near
I am all around in the sky and in the ground
I am in our kids
in your heart
my love caries on
when u need me look to the sky
let your mind fly
I will be there holding your hand
goodbye to those I love
we will meet again one day
we will play in the heavens above
(Just wondering what people thought of my poem)
2007-03-06 12:58:51 · 7 answers · asked by Gypsy 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
i wrote this thinking of what the soldiers over seas would want to say to their familes
2007-03-06 13:03:18 · update #1
I really liked it. Very good.
2007-03-06 13:02:55 · answer #1 · answered by Phartzalot 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I really like it and it's interesting to hear things from different perspective. I like the rhyme scheme. The syllables in each line varies often, which makes the reading less smooth, but it is still an incredible poem and you have a lot of insight.
2007-03-06 13:43:17 · answer #2 · answered by Blood_of_a_Vampyre 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very good, although it reminds of a country song called "I'm already there" by Diamond Rio (I think that's who sings it). Although the song is about coming home eventually, and not death, it still reminds me of it.
It is a beautiful tribute.
2007-03-06 13:03:09 · answer #3 · answered by I See You 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that's pretty good! i havn't actually heard a good poem in a while so it's good that i got the chance to hear yours. good work!
2007-03-06 13:03:57 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
WOW your super deep thats amazing! u should publish it!
2007-03-06 13:06:10 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I did not read it i just wanted to answer a question for 2 points
So i will lie to u and say good
2007-03-06 13:01:49 · answer #6 · answered by Johnny S 3 · 0⤊ 5⤋
I love it! its really good, and deep.
2007-03-06 13:03:21 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋