Hello everyone! I love writing, so I decided to write a poem about something I enjoy; playing the guitar! Any comments and/or constructive critisism would be appreciated!
The Soul of Rock 'n Roll:
Setting me free
To a world of solitude
Bass vibrating
Intensity set at its maximum
Each strum is a new key
Of my soul
Unlocking the wild side
Of my solemn, conservative world
This staff holds the notes
Of my life
Feel the everlasting beat
Gliding between my fingers
This music streams from the amp
To captivate existence
Plucking the firm strings
That unleashes the soul of rock ‘n roll.
2007-03-06 12:35:33 · 3 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
I liked it. I like the last line, it reminds me of something Jack Black would say. can you hear it? LOL Nicely done. I love guitar too.
2007-03-06 13:39:25 · answer #1 · answered by whitebutterfly24 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Well done on building the poem toward a crescendo - but I'd sure love to hear a wha-bam at the end to bring your image to life. Great until the last line, that... just... leads... off.... know what I mean?
2007-03-06 20:46:52 · answer #2 · answered by joyfulpaints 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
i think it was very good. some of the wording semed to take the poem off beat a little but that is my personal oppnion. I realy like it it creates a grate image and feeling!
2007-03-06 21:14:42 · answer #3 · answered by Gypsy 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋