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Question

The anti-Vietnam war movement in whole affected many aspects if American life. It poorly changed the way that people viewed their government and it was the cause of many social issues in the U.S.; it also took American culture for a spin and affected the way that people will protest forever.

How can i change or edit this to make it better, more efficent or clean cut?

Answer 1

The anti-Vietnam war movement affected many aspects of American life. It drastically changed the way the government was perceived by the American people as well as contributed to many social issues within the United States. American culture also suffered, as it changed the course of protest forever.

Answer 2

The anti-Vietnam war movement as a whole affected many aspects of American life. People began to view the government as a major cause of important social issues in the U.S. and at the same time permanently changed the meaning of the word protest for many people.


That is my suggestion, but the ideas you have in here are pretty vague. Usually a thesis has three definite, clear points. Then in the rest of the paper, you should explain those three points in great depth. The concept that it caused the American people to change thier view on the government because they were causing social issues is an excellent point. I am not sure I understand how it affected the WAY people protest, but maybe how the felt about it? If you add more details, I would be glad to expand.

Answer 3

The anti-Vietnam war movement in whole affected many aspects of American life, poorly changing the view of the government by the American people, causing many social issues in the U.S. This movement changed American culture, affecting the way people will protest forever.

Answer 4

The Vietnam war protests had many subtle effects on even the lives of ordinary Americans. There were a general discontent with the American government that resulted in numerous social issues. The protests also had an enduring affect on American culture, having long-lasting effects on method of protest.

I don't really know how valid your statement is but I cleaned up some of the writing.

Answer 5

Cleaner:
The anti-Vietnam war movment affected various aspects of American life. Some citizens began viewing their government's involvement in this war with greater distrust as well as distrusting the various interests and lobbies that affect governmental decisionmaking. There grew out of this a greater willingness to criticize the status quo after the conformity prevalent in the 1950s. Authority in many areas of our culture was questioned including parental authority which affected future child rearing; institutions such as education and church; and the culture of big business.
You must avoid inane phrases such as "for a spin", "in whole" and such vague statements that it "affected the way that people will protest forever." Remember specificity is everything after you cite your thesis sentence. Professors can tell when you do not know the subject adequately when you are vague just to "fill up" space. Be direct and to the point.
I do NOT suggest you use what I have written because I do not know specifically what you have been studying and you must think for yourself. It is meant only as a guide. Study hard and learn. It will change your life.

Answer 6

Make it ONE sentence. It will focus you better. In that sentence, include ONLY the thing/s you intend to prove in your paper. You have a lot going here. Right now, it looks like you intend to prove that

THE ANTI-VIETNAM WAR MOVEMENT
1. caused people to start viewing the government negatively
2. was the cause of many social issues in the US (whatever that means--very vague! what social issues? how many do you really want to get into? how long is this paper supposed to be???)
3. "took American culture for a spin" (ditto #2--huh? what does that mean?)
4. affected (in what way/s????) the way that people (all people, or just Americans?) will protest forever (wow! really??? you can see forever???)

As presented here, your paper will ramble all over the place. Unless you're planning to write a pretty comprehensive book about Vietnam war protesting, you'd better focus your thesis very ruthlessly. There will still be plenty to write about.

Answer 7

The anti-Vietnam War movement was a justified and legal response to a poorly concieved, badly executed, costly, and needless war. It revealed government abuse of power to millions of tax paying citizens who concluded they had been lied to by their elected officials. Any extremes of the anti-war movement were either provoked by agent-provocateurs in the employ of the government, or were fictional creations of pro war supporters. One such example was the often repeated LIE that soldiers were spat upon by anti-war protestors: this evil claim has now been researched and has been proven to be a total lie.

I think thats a good start on improving it. Thanks for asking.

So are you saying the Vietnam War was a good thing? Are you saying we should go back and finish the job? Are you saying people have no right to protest? My God, its in the Constitution! Peaceful redress of grievances is allowed. Lets be clear: the war was wrong, the protesters were right. Remember the Domino Theory had it that if "we" "lost" Vietnam the whole world would go Communist, but behold, we lost Vietnam and Communism collapsed--the Domino Theory was disproven by history about as clearly as anything ever has. Again: war, wrong. Protesters right.

Answer 8

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