A condemning silence weighed the air in this small, sparsely furnished box I found myself in. I was positioned in a hard metal chair, my wrists handcuffed awkwardly to the standard table in front of me. I had been in this same tedious positions going on hours now but I knew I was not alone. In fact I would bet on money that there were at least half a dozen eyes memorizing my every movement, catching every twitch and blink I gave off and recorded it for later use. Pushing down the urge to make obnoxious faces into the deceivingly one-sided mirror to quail the boredom that was slowly taking over my mind; I stared straight ahead trying to hide to the fear of the situation. I also tried consoling myself, uselessly trying to convince myself that I had come out of worse situations unharmed. I knew it wasn’t true and I also knew that last time I had been in this situation I hadn’t cared where I ended up. Last time I had nothing to lose.
2007-03-05 14:21:44 · 13 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
That was really good, are you writing a book? What does he(?) have to loose this time? Why is he there? What other time was he in that situation? I have to know!!!
(I think he should make obnoxious faces into the two-sided mirror. Just for fun! ha ha ha! :D)
( Is it a guy or a girl, you didnt say?)
2007-03-06 08:13:15 · answer #1 · answered by Sarah Kanoewai 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋
The content is great, very gripping and realistic, I give it a 10. The grammar and spelling will need to be corrected when you edit, but don't worry about it until then or you will get bogged down with it and not finish the writing part.
2007-03-05 19:16:56 · answer #2 · answered by kiera70 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes. Sounds like the old Nick Carter books.
2007-03-05 14:26:29 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'd read more. I like it. It really catches you cause now I wanna know why he's were he is, what happened last time, what it is he has to lose and all that good stuff. I really like it. If this is yours you should post it on www.fanfiction.com or something and then tell me so I can read the rest. I WANNA KNOW WHAT HAPPENS NOW!!! lol.
I'm serious. I like it and wanna read more.
2007-03-05 14:26:39 · answer #4 · answered by aerojo05 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
yeah i guess it makes me curious in terms of the situation, but it's a bit slow-paced.....in fact nothing actually happens in the entire paragraph, so it would have to be followed by a paragraph where somthing actually happened or i would get bored and stop reading
2007-03-05 14:25:47 · answer #5 · answered by thisisabsurd 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It made me suddenly grew hunger to read more. Are you a poet, writing a book or trying your ability to do some imaginatory work.
2007-03-05 14:31:22 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hey, that's a good story. Writing it for English class?
2007-03-05 14:25:03 · answer #7 · answered by raging aspen 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It needs some proofreading but it sounds good. Could you maybe email me a copy sometime....I love to read!
2007-03-05 14:24:49 · answer #8 · answered by inscribson 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes, it does. What is it from? Are you writing a book?
2007-03-05 14:24:21 · answer #9 · answered by chellek 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's great except for "that I found myself in" in the first part. It makes me cringe. (Sorry)
2007-03-05 14:48:21 · answer #10 · answered by Pooky W 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋