Papa?
Yes, son?
Is this the train ride you promised?
Yes. Yes, it is.
I thought there were seats.
Well, all of the seats are filled.
Is that why everyone here is standing?
Yes.
I heard some people saying “Oświęcim”.
I heard them too, son.
Is that where we’re going?
No. Oświęcim no longer exists.
What do you mean?
They renamed it, remember? The soldiers.
But it’s still there, isn’t it?
It’s all in the name.
The name?
Oświęcim is beautiful, and you think of that when you hear it.
And now we don’t?
Now we don’t. After all . . .
Papa?
Auschwitz doesn’t sound half so beautiful.
2007-03-05 10:21:16 · 10 answers · asked by Katie M 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
I know it's unconventional, but my English teacher assured me that it can be considered a poem.
2007-03-05 10:26:37 · update #1
Yes, I wrote it.
How to pronounce it: take the first part of "ocean", add "v", end with "shim".
2007-03-05 10:56:36 · update #2
Not being patronising at all...I think it's excellent! There's a load of people who post poems and ask 'what do you think?' This is the first one I've actuallly written a comment on. Thought provoking about language and identity. I like the child's 'simplicity' too. As for the concept of it being a 'poem', I agree that it is as it uses elements of modernism, and they are all necessary when considering such a subject. Rhyming couplets or alternate rhyme? A regular rhythm? Iambic pentameter? None would have been suitable in my view. Spot on!
2007-03-06 05:53:49 · answer #1 · answered by Rachael B 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's actually quite promising. However, I think it's more of a short story told entirely in dialogue than a poem. If I were you I would take the time to heighten the language and incorporate more figurative, metaphorical, and anagogical content if I wanted people to see it as a poem.
2007-03-12 15:40:23 · answer #2 · answered by nbsandiego 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i actually liked it... it kept my attention and i have a really short attention span so normally i would have given up on reading something but honestly i liked it.... i dont know if i would consider it a poem but i guess some poems are like that im not sure but lol yes it was very deep and thought through!!
2007-03-05 10:32:52 · answer #3 · answered by el Diablo 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it very much. One of my first thoughts is that it would fit in with a collection of others written in the same style, not necessarily of similar subject matter, but style. Maybe twenty of them in a booklet. Anyways, enjoy yourself.
2007-03-12 06:34:46 · answer #4 · answered by canron4peace 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hmmm...very sad. I can't say I "like" it because of its sadness, but it's very profound. But rilly I can't see a father saying to his son that this is "the train ride" that he promised him when it's something so morbid.
Other than that, it's profound, and gets you thinking.
2007-03-05 10:28:26 · answer #5 · answered by ♣Tascalcoán♣ 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow. This is very good. Did you write it?
How do you say the Polish?
2007-03-05 10:44:47 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's more of a convesation than a poem.
2007-03-05 10:25:38 · answer #7 · answered by Sophist 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I am sorry but I dont like it. Just doesn't catch my interest.
2007-03-12 03:48:45 · answer #8 · answered by Mary 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
interesting
2007-03-12 03:31:25 · answer #9 · answered by Tina 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I loved it, thank you
2007-03-10 03:34:44 · answer #10 · answered by weasleywanabe 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋