Destiny
u mean da world 2 me
i lov u so much
u changed my life with a touch
and ur the only 1 I want
i sleep cing ur face in a haunt
one day i tell u how i feel
den u tell me da luv i hav iznt real
but i hav 2 understand wat ur going through
and all the things u hav 2 do
i tryed jus not to care
but jus thinkin,it seems lik ur there
i miss u all da time
everyday wishin u where mine
its jus hard to let u go
when i already kno
dat its true
i really luv u
2007-03-05 09:49:35 · 4 answers · asked by lololololololololol 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
was it wrong for me to tell u dat i luv u
but u jus dont kno wat im goin through
it hurts knowing ill do n e thing 4 u
but watever i do
will probably jus b meaningless to u
i jus dont get love n e more
i thought u were da 1 i was goin 2 luv and adore
i did but now all dat is gone
but 4 sum reason i cant move on
2007-03-05 09:49:51 · update #1
u told me i was 2 young
to really see love
how u goin 2 tell me dat
when true luv fell from above
u told me i jus like u
but thats not true
theres so many things ill do 4 u
there are no words that express how i feel
i jus no its real
u want to stay friends i do 2
but before i end this i want 2 say
i still luv u
2007-03-05 09:50:14 · update #2
its hard for me to deny that i luv u when i do
i want a relationship to happen but its all up to u
your the one i wouldnt want to lose
theres so many people in dis world i hope im the one u choose
ur beautiful but with a good heart to,dat had to be sent from above
a special person lik you deserve more luv
im prayin sum day will be together
but r friendship is enough hopin it will last forever
2007-03-05 09:50:40 · update #3
it's ok but proper grammar is important in poetry. fix the spelling, capitalize stuff, use proper punctuation and then rework it a little it. it could be really good.
peace
2007-03-05 10:06:18 · answer #1 · answered by Shadow Lark 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Not a fan sorry. Much too Teenage angsty. It also doesn't make sense and is contradictory.
I personally don't think the grammar matters as long as it has a purpose behind it. However this must be made clear or you just look like an illiterate.
2007-03-05 21:29:34 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's not about you. There's a whole world out there. Love notes are private, and boring to read if they're not to you. Good that you like to write, try broadening your horizons.
2007-03-06 20:11:15 · answer #3 · answered by kipster968 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
omg!!! those poems are beautiful. Some day ur going to be a famous poet I kno it. lol
2007-03-05 17:56:59 · answer #4 · answered by Natalie F 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋