Restored...
Today for some reason I feel good,
And life is back to being the way it should,
Life before him has now been restored,
And the mistakes that I made can now be ignored.
Wondered when this time would come,
Had started to doubt what I had done,
But in my heart I always knew,
Honesty would pull me through.
Now I don't feel guilty if I catch somebodies eye,
And when I go into my room it isn't to cry,
I'm more than happy to be me,
And proud that I've found a way to be.
2007-03-04 23:35:47 · 14 answers · asked by Lindsay T 1 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
i think its lovely! well done you!x
2007-03-04 23:39:33 · answer #1 · answered by pinkjessie 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I don't think that you will find many people who will tell you that your poem is bad, even if it is. I'm glad to hear that you have recovered from your breakup.
It is better than many of the poems I have seen on this website.
Constructive criticism:
Your poem appears to be loosely bound to a meter, but deviates from it in a manner which does not seem organized or premeditated. It is also hackneyed, but reading lots of poetry will probably fix that.
I see that my entry is unpopular. This is probably because people tend to group criticism of people's heartfelt poetry with the kicking of puppies; however, since criticism is what you are after, it is the least I can give. Coddling an artist is no way to help him/her.
2007-03-05 07:49:28 · answer #2 · answered by Biznachos 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I think it's beautiful. Simplicity at best!
Just one minor correction... instead of "somebodies", it should be somebody's or someone's.
I really like it. I can feel the strength radiating from it. Good job!
2007-03-05 07:46:00 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your artistic expressions should be for you. If they make you feel good then it doesn't matter what anyone else thinks. This strikes me as more of song lyrics than poetry. "Just because it rhymes, doesn't make it poetic". You should write a chorus for this and put it to music. :)
2007-03-05 07:44:18 · answer #4 · answered by ManWarBear 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
awesom seriously good fantastic fabulous great and superb i wod rate it 100 but circumstances say 10 but is it genuinely written by u?
2007-03-05 07:45:51 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
on a scale of 1 to 10, I'd give it an 8.5
2007-03-05 07:40:02 · answer #6 · answered by Brown eyed girl 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's pretty good. There are hints of emotion, but nothing too deep.
2007-03-05 07:38:48 · answer #7 · answered by SarangHaeyo 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
thats very good 10
2007-03-05 07:43:50 · answer #8 · answered by jody n 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i give it a high sen out of ten
2007-03-05 07:39:03 · answer #9 · answered by brighterthanyou 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Well, i'm not good at poem stuff....But i like your poem..( Nice one )honestly ....I'm going to copy it.. :)
2007-03-05 07:43:22 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋