you ripped my heart out from my chest and showed it to me said you didnt want it so you threw it away left me there in a puddle of blood with a note signed on your name a knife in hand is it really worth the pain you left me there walked away yet im dead and you have dreams of me while i sleep one so deep and strong you have to take anti phsycotics to make them stay at bay yet no medication can keep me at bay even in death i am watching you from angels gates you are on the road with you vivid nightmares of me yet when you finally figure out what you did you regret it is to late to go back because i am already gone on the road once again with the knfie in your hand you take it back but im dead are you happy?
2007-03-04 21:19:19 · 9 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music
nice it just need to be played by either a punk band or a metalcore band
2007-03-04 21:29:22 · answer #1 · answered by TwinnedChimera 3 · 1⤊ 1⤋
like tia stated ask a track instructor,additionally do no longer pay interest to them who cares in the journey that your in simple terms 15 you should write songs at any age.Oh and don't hassle issues will prove fantastic i mean you could desire to get out of that rut your in quicker or later.real?
2016-10-02 10:05:25 · answer #2 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that's been said before, in different ways, by just about every band who thrives on depressed teenagers (which as Bart Simpson said is just about as easy as "shooting fidh in a barrel").
Why don't you try to write about something no one has written about before? OR try to write what you've written above in a less boring way?
Basically, you've reinvented the wheel and are expecting people to be in awe of your ability to reinvent the wheel.
2007-03-04 21:23:46 · answer #3 · answered by yuntaa_dba 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Is this a prose or a poem?
I think formatting the above like a poem would give it a lot more impact.
2007-03-04 21:27:05 · answer #4 · answered by Monk Mst 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
really really really really bad.. bordering on tawdry and over dramatic and gloomy as heck.
Sorry but you asked
Just a run on sentence of words that ...well break it up a little... discover the wonders of punctuation...
A tad self involved and angst ridden, not my style
Needs a lotttttttttttttttt of work
2007-03-04 21:26:04 · answer #5 · answered by Noor al Haqiqa 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Very pathetic.
Not very good, sorry but about this whole subject I heard it much better before.
2007-03-04 21:48:40 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 2⤋
wow, sounds like somebody hurt you. that sucks.
but great wording.
2007-03-04 21:34:57 · answer #7 · answered by lkjgfyfukh 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Yuck.This reaalllllyyy suuuuucksssss
What are u? An idiot?A psycho.....Or what???
2007-03-04 21:46:58 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 2⤋
sorry bud,- try again.
2007-03-04 21:28:30 · answer #9 · answered by kspq7652 3 · 1⤊ 1⤋