As the wind blows,
through the trees,
at noon day.
you can't see,
the air,
but you can see the effects,
and you can feel,
the cool breeze blow,
Love, is like the wind,
you can't see it, but you
can
see and feel the efects
of THIS love.
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rate 1-10,
2007-03-04 13:35:25 · 15 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
7 sounds like a fair rating. The poem might need a little more rhythm. Some lines may need more syllables. Maybe try and make them a little more symmetrical, since it is somewhat choppy. I enjoyed reading it though, keep it up.
2007-03-04 13:45:11 · answer #1 · answered by Morphage 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
3
2007-03-04 21:41:39 · answer #2 · answered by lilliebug06 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
6
2007-03-04 21:43:25 · answer #3 · answered by Lauren 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
7
2007-03-04 21:40:26 · answer #4 · answered by prolife101 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i would give it 3,,,,
As the wind blows,
through the trees,
at noon day.
you can feel,
the cool breeze blow.
Now it is good.
2007-03-04 21:43:14 · answer #5 · answered by Dan Brown 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I give it a 7.5 not only did you share your emotions in this poem but also connected it to something pysical and real. Only thing I can think of is that it is slightly bland...but that can easily be fixed withh a few more creative, and elevated words that can further the visual effects of the poem. You shared a part of yourself and thats what poetry is really about.
I loved reading it!
Thanks for sharing
VESPER
2007-03-05 00:43:55 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
it is an 8
2007-03-04 21:42:29 · answer #7 · answered by John L 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it is a chicks poem that would make it an 10 in that but, as males 3 maybe 4. as humans not much better i am sorry.
2007-03-04 21:43:40 · answer #8 · answered by playafromtha361 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Arrrg... There is no vivid imagery, no creative comparison, and the choppiness of the lines is out of place. You, my good lady, only recieve a 2. Try again.
2007-03-04 21:44:12 · answer #9 · answered by sam_we_is 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I rate it an 8. I love poetry.
2007-03-04 21:39:43 · answer #10 · answered by snowwhite 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋