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Hey guys, I wrote a song and tell me what you think about. Please be honest. It’s rock, it sounds like simple plan/AFI/Bowling for Soup.

Revenge is too Cliché.

We all remember the cheerleading squad.
The long blond hair, they thought you’re odd.
The football team, remember that day?
Your head in the toilet, flushing away.
And freshman year, I made out with that dude.
Who said he loved me, and got me nude.
But left me later for that slutty girl,
But life is like that. Get used to the world.

*Chorus*
Yeah, it’s funny, all those times.
It’s nothing but Hell for the memory of mine.
Don’t worry they’ll get what they deserve.
Everything has a reason, don’t get in God’s way.
Cuz Revenge is too cliché.
Revenge is too cliché.

And July 4th, that party last year.
Police came just cuz of beer.
Some kid called the cops, the cops saw the drugs.
And remember at Macy’s, stealing those ugly Uggs?

Mom and Dad never there for you,
Never supporting what got you through.
Whenever something happened, I got blamed
But those fights in the streets earned me my name.

*Chorus*

Remember protesting at KFC?
And getting grounded for those D’s?
Hanging out with guys and guns,
What else does society call fun?
I’m the bad one, the one who doesn’t conform.
And supposedly, I’m not supposed to be informed
About what goes on
But now I know there’s less pros than cons.
Close your eyes, and in a second.
All your trouble will be gone.

*Chorus*
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thx!

Answer 1

This is an AWESOME peice of work! Kind of reminds me of Something about Benj's life...but in a different way how his dad left the family and stuff...that was sad. Felt bad.
But this is awesome, try this song with your guitar lesson teacher (the hot dude) and you two should play something new! Make it a song together!
*btw, why is benji your picture on here??? He's a fruit cake! lol.