Do you like my poems? Which ones are your favorites? Which ones do you dislike?

Question

Rage
The yelling and screaming
Didn’t have any meaning
The smashing and crashing
Didn’t make any sense
While I was tense
I was deep inside crying
Slowly dying
And wanted it all to be solved
But I kept on yelling
All of a sudden
The room started to crowd
I had no more strength
I started to calm down
I looked around
And saw rage
Then I remembered how it all began
When things went bad
Rage climbed out within me
I couldn’t hold it any longer
I couldn’t fathom how it became stronger
It had become me
There I was
Rage

Sry i mean do u like my POEM?

Answer 1

i like it

Answer 2

Honest opinion: I found it an interesting topic for a poem, but I disliked it (2.5/10,) and don't get why most people liked it. I disliked it because of its extremely inconsistent rhythm and rhyming meter. It would have probably been better if you would have written it in free verse, and all in all, it had no flow to it. To me, all those rhymes just sounded, well... silly, and all those rhymes made your poem sound as if a second grader just made some nonsensical rhymes like "A pig wore a wig, and then ate a fig". Also, it could use some metaphors; to make it more intriguing, for example, describe your rage, as black as the night, or as black as the deepest pits of hell. They might not sound as good just alone like that, but with a couple of metaphors, and an intelligent rhyming scheme, a flow, and some consistent rhythm, you might really get there. Another huge problem of the poem is that it really didn't have a tone and leaves you with ZERO emotion. After reading it, it didn't leave me sad, or depressed, and to me, it was just a group of words. The only reason I gave you a 2.5, is that you at least tried writing something. I recommend you read some better, more potent poetry for inspiration and if you like depressing poems, you might want to check out Poe, my personally favorite poet.

Sorry.

Answer 3

I don't think the rhymes had any flow to them.But keep writing,i am 16 and ive written a few poems and posted them on here and i get heavy insults along with compliments.Check out some of my poems if you would like

Answer 4

Don't take this the wrong way, I think you wrote it well, but I personally don't like poems that are depressing. I like a poem that is either inspiring or funny or uplifting.
I usually read poetry when I am already sad or bored to get myself in a better mood,and for a good pick-me up, so that I don't dwell in sadness or anger. I don't want another sad thought to think about if I am already sad.
I realize that it was probably very theraputic to write for you. However it is very important to consider your audience. In most cases they like to be inspired and not to bummed out or angered.
It is good that you take the time to write though. I do too, but I write childrens stories and childrens poetry.

Answer 5

HEY! I liked that alot...very metephoric. As a writer, let me say, it's VERY good. :-)

Answer 6

wow, thats GOOD! its awsome man! you should get copyrights on that!

Answer 7

yeh, but i didnt get it.