can you please proof read my essay?

Question

Bag Lady

I am a reporter of local newspaper and today I am spending my time observing peoples reactions as I live alongside a homeless woman. I had noticed the anger and the sadness in her eyes. Looks form the eyes of strangers who passed her on the street, rush past without noticeable unease.
As soon as people passed by us, most looked at me—ignoring her existence. The way I was dressed and looked made my appearance a lot better than hers. This actually didn’t make me feel any better. In my opinion, many people have judged the bag lady without getting to know her.
Water was dripping down her clothes cutting off the violence on the streets. It seemed like those people took advantage of each other.
If only for the moment, the homeless, not only are viewed as less than human by society.
I felt bad enough for the lady on the street. I wanted to do something special for her—like taking her out to dinner or something. However, I know that I will only take care

Answer 1

Sure, my changes will be in parathensis:
I am a reporter (from the) local newspaper and today(,) I am spending my time observing people(')s reactions (by) living alongside a homeless woman. I had (should be have, you are writing your essay in present tense so don't switch to past tense) noticed the anger and the sadness in her eyes. Looks form the eyes of strangers who passed her on the street, rush past without noticeable unease. (not complete sentence)
As soon as (could change to when) people passed by us, (most of them) looked at me—ignoring her existence. The way I was dressed and looked made my appearance a lot better than her(')s. This actually (get rid of acctually) didn’t make me feel any better. In my opinion, many people have judged the bag lady without getting to know her.
Water was dripping down her clothes cutting off the violence on the streets. It seemed like those people took advantage of each other.
If only for the moment, the homeless, not only are viewed as less than human by society. (this sentence doesn't make sense)
I felt bad enough for the lady on the street. I wanted to do something special for her—like taking her out to dinner or something. However, I know that I will only take care(end this sentence).

Answer 2

I am a reporter of local newspaper. Today, I am spending my time observing peoples' reactions towards a homeless woman of whom I live alongside . I had noticed a lot of anger and the sadness in her eyes. Looks from the eyes of strangers who passed her on the street, rush past with noticeable unease.
As soon as people passed by us, most looked at me—ignoring her existence. The way I was dressed and looked made my appearance a lot better than hers. This actually didn’t make me feel any better. In my opinion, many people have judged the bag lady without getting to know her.
Water was dripping down her clothes cutting off the violence on the streets. It seemed like those people took advantage of each other.
If only for the moment, the homeless, are viewed as less than human by society.
I felt bad enough for the lady on the street. I wanted to do something special for her—like taking her out to dinner or something. However, I know that I will only take care

Answer 3

It needs more help than glitter gave you.

You need to read your work very slowly and see if it makes sense to you.

It is 'actions' not 'reactions'.

Looks 'from' not 'form'.

The way people looked at her made me uneasy.

How does dripping water affect violence?.

'If only for the moment" is a convoluted sentence.

'I will only care' not 'take care'

Answer 4

I proof read it, and added to it, on the next question, You did good