do you like my poem?

Question

religions sell salvation
making promises hard to keep
confusing the mind with contradicting beliefs
the modern way of thinking
seekeng refuge in a material world
where everchanging values are givin relief
tearing down the prison walls
of our cloned society
for we sleepwalk in the crowd
of conformity
reconstructing all a new
values of the past re-alight the flame
if our children r the last will tht be their legancy
is there another chance?

the title is ''fatal illusions''...

hey pal,why u ask this?of course no prblem..and thnx so much..

Answer 1

I love this poem as much as John Lennon's "Imagine" it's all true what you are stating and i wish more people would write as beautiful poems as you just did because this world needs to see what is real and what is not. Thank you.
P.S. is it ok if i show it to other people, i promise i wont say its mine because your poem is the truth.

Answer 2

pretty cool, here look at mine: http://www.poetry.com/Publications/display.asp?ID=P8395174&BN=999&PN=1

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I wake up with the sun
I sleep with the night
How wonderful it is to watch the morning light
I thank God for this day
No worries nor stress
That you brought this angel my way
I feel so blessed
You're there when I need you
And when I don't
You always listen to me, even when I won't
You came to me
Worry-free and unafraid
Babe, I'm so happy the sun shone on this day
Ok technically it was night
But I don't care cuz with you by my side
There ain't nothing bringin me down
And that's alright
From the bottom of my heart, you have my love
And all thanks go to you, my lord, my God!

Deborah Nana
Copyright ©2007 Deborah Nana

I dedicated this to my boyfriend. I love him so much.
I hope your poem does you well.

Answer 3

I really liked it you are really good and don't listen to that other guy who called you a hippie.

Answer 4

That's terrible. Go get a job you pot smoking hippie.

Answer 5

good poem it looks like a great poem to me and i hope it makes you a popular poet...