A single red rose rests upon a grand piano, reveling in its own delicate beauty. The room contains no walls; its boundaries are limitless. A rich, midnight black is presents throughout the atmosphere. Though the room exists boundless, the rose possesses a divine aura, which blossoms in the eyes of many. It signifies a vast number of things… A petal dropped for Loneliness… A petal shed for Hope… A petal given for Romance… A petal kept for Solitude… Yet, somewhere, amidst all of its meanings, lays a hushed heavenly elegance.
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Please give me an honest critique. Yes, I realize the rose is classic and may seem to you overused.. Put that aside and pretend the rose is still meaningful to you if you feel this way. The paragraph is meant to describe and evoke a feeling about the essence of the photgraph...
Please be honest in what you think.. Thank you!!
2007-03-03 10:48:46 · 7 answers · asked by Kiara 5 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
I love that excert! very very detailed---but a few things
1. "A rich, midnight black is presents throughout the atmosphere. "........do you mean present? no 's'.
2. Though the room exists boundless, the rose possesses a divine aura, which blossoms in the eyes of many.
--this sentence almost does not seem to fit and it I am having a hard time deciphering what it means...what does a room being boundless (or limitless) have to do with a rose being divine..."defined" maybe but not divine. I don't see the connection between a boundless room to a divine rose...maybe you could explain it to me more indepth?
the petals being shed and held was very beautiful...I loved the way I did not need to see the picture when reading this because all i need was your words to draw me one!
loved it!
VESPER
2007-03-03 11:14:22 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
Beautiful! I thought it was vivid and at the same time descriptive enough to make this rose become what the reader wants it to respresent. I see the rose being the ruler of the room and even though its surroundings is endless, the rose represents eternity. Very good! Keep up the good work. Since I am the critic, I will say you can pass go and collect $200.00. ):
2007-03-03 13:19:06 · answer #2 · answered by Justgina 2 · 2⤊ 0⤋
i imagine people will be at liberty to have the opinion that they opt for. they should be in a position to precise there opinion, and those who listen (which should be a great number of people) must have an open ideas, and probably replace there opinion. some evaluations gained't grow to be something, even though it doesnt advise there valueless. in spite of if no man or woman treasures your opinion, you need to. Its what makes you who you're.
2016-11-27 19:35:26 · answer #3 · answered by tubb 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I really liked the poem...I still belive in the beauty and power of a rose...keep up the great writing!!
2007-03-03 11:00:49 · answer #4 · answered by writersbestfriend 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
It represents love left by someone who apprciates beauty in life
2007-03-03 10:58:41 · answer #5 · answered by Gentleman 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
That's very good. Continue the good work. You have the making of
a very good novelist.
2007-03-03 11:03:56 · answer #6 · answered by hunterentertainment 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
kitchy
2007-03-03 10:52:31 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋