It goes like this:
Clear your history as ye will
Delete ,erase your archives
But ye should know,on judgement day
That Christ will check your hard drive.
I think
2007-03-03 07:15:12 · 14 answers · asked by mickeok 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
For me the use of "ye" particularly "as ye will" is un natural which is a pet hate of mine. I don't like language to be twisted or distorted just to fit into the poem. It sounds particularly out of place as you are dealing with computers which are a very modern concept but perhaps that's what you were going for, a juxtaposing of ideas, in which case great job, just didn't work for me. "ye should know" actual is particular strange. I really don't think those words work together at all. It just sounds daft.
the concept is interesting though, definitely worth pursuing, well done.
2007-03-03 07:28:34 · answer #1 · answered by gerrifriend 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The modern feeling of the last line does not fit in with the use of "ye" earlier. Also in the first and second lines "change", "delete" and "erase" are all the same thing. So the use of both in superfluous.
I would suggest:
"Change your history as you will
Leave no trace in archive cache
But know that still on Judgement Day
That Christ will check your hardest drive"
2007-03-03 15:28:40 · answer #2 · answered by BARROWMAN 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This poem for me tells me that no matter how much we try to delete and forget all the sin we have done in our lives it can never really be deleted. Only Christ can really delete and cancel out all of our sins.
2007-03-07 11:38:24 · answer #3 · answered by scotland1 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
A little like Herrick's Gather ye rosebuds while ye may
"gather ye rosebuds while ye may,
Old time he is a-flyin',
The flower that's in bloom today
Tomorrow will be dyin'"
as far as I can remember it.
2007-03-05 07:25:34 · answer #4 · answered by Vivienne T 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Is this an sermon against pr0n?
Are you some sort of religious nutcase?
Anyway, I'm willing to bet that Jesus "tap-dancing" Christ is not computer literate. I don't think they had Windoze, all those years ago. =P
2007-03-03 15:28:34 · answer #5 · answered by Zerg Proletariat 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
That reminds me... I'd better erase the hard drive too!!!
2007-03-07 14:43:45 · answer #6 · answered by stormc2 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not too good. And why is the name Christ in it? Are you trying to scare people that haven't heard this rubbish yet?
2007-03-03 15:19:42 · answer #7 · answered by R.E.M.E. 5 · 0⤊ 3⤋
Nice one.A good way of expressing your thoughts.
2007-03-03 15:28:41 · answer #8 · answered by Niamh 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I liked it
2007-03-03 15:26:49 · answer #9 · answered by tra 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Yea, what you're meaning to say is better than how you wrote it.
2007-03-03 15:25:59 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋