Do you think this is good?

Question

This is a poem I wrote yesterday. (I don't do what it says, it just kinda felt how i was feeling.)


Fallen Blood

Tears roll down my cheeks,
And my vision starts to blur.

The pain grows stronger,
As the knife goes deeper.

I’m all a lone in my room,
With the radio on to drown out my cries.

No one knows how I torture myself,
But even if they did they wouldn’t understand.

Since when have they ever really listened?
And tried to really comfort me,

I honestly can’t remember,
But why would it matter now?

The pain’s already too much,
And the knife helps me sometimes.

I know I shouldn’t do this,
But what else is there to do?

I can’t talk to anyone anymore,
And I can’t show that I’m sad.

So I take all my anger out on myself,
As I make new scars each night.

Sooner or later this won’t help much,
And then all blood will flow.

I don't actually cut myself, and I do talk to someone. And I'm not going to try any of what it says. I'm just saying that hows I felt.

Answer 1

that is great! but you really shouldn't cut yourself. your poem gave me chills!

Answer 2

Its good but depressing. If you even feel that way its time to talk to someone. Its only a matter of time before you consider actually trying it. I hope not, but you should at least think about it.

Answer 3

please talk to someone sweetheart.been down this road,it aint nice,and trust me there is light at the end of the tunnel!!!!