"The day's just beginning, you see the girl you love, you don't know what to do or say, you're friends, you talk to eachother everyday, on the phone, computer, etc, you're walking with her, talking, laughing, having the time of your life, the sun hits ya, you smile at her she smiles at you, it's time to say goodbye, you hug and walk off, you're walking, past places where we played as kids, later you talk to eachother, time's ending, you say you'll see eachother tomorrow, you know what, you're in goddamn love, is there anything else better in the world"
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2007-03-03 04:42:36 · 12 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Friends
I think it's great... Is that really true? You seem to be beaming off some goddamn love... Lol... I can't write a free verse poem worth a ****... You've got talent... AND skill.
2007-03-03 04:46:44 · answer #1 · answered by ... 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your first poem shows that you are interested very well in heart-beat poem. Though it is a little bit modernized. But fine.
As i pace through you poem,literally, i think you need more observation upon the poems that originated by famouses.
Fear not. If you want the copyright authorities, published it.
http://groups.myspace.com/writingandpoetry
They said,
Writing and poetry exposed to agents and publishers (for serious writers and poets)
p/s: lots of famous authors too..
2007-03-03 13:02:52 · answer #2 · answered by middle of mind 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Don't like it, sorry...
goddamn and love in the same sentence... strange... especially since you mean it in a positive way..
2007-03-03 12:46:52 · answer #3 · answered by shay223 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
No need for copyright. Who would try to plagiarize that?
2007-03-03 12:45:04 · answer #4 · answered by Toona Salid 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that is soooooooooo good keep up the work if write a book email me ill by it
2007-03-03 12:45:36 · answer #5 · answered by lisa 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
etc in a poem=bad
thats the only thing =]
2007-03-03 12:52:30 · answer #6 · answered by Kim 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Anything from someone's heart is always good.
2007-03-03 12:53:05 · answer #7 · answered by mosrider2002 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its not that great, but the worst part is the use of the abreviation "etc"...... anyway, i am sure the girl you wrote it for will be flattered.
2007-03-03 12:46:34 · answer #8 · answered by don't be rude. 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
awwwwwwwww how cute that was so good and i bet you are in LOVE LOVE!! i bet that she would really love you for writing that
2007-03-03 12:58:23 · answer #9 · answered by Claire M 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
dont do the copyright thing but other then that, its fantastic.
2007-03-03 12:47:58 · answer #10 · answered by bella 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋