hes the most beautiful garden
the most beautiful garden spoiled upon daisys
i picked at the stems so close too near
he gave and shook me with anger and fear
i understand the way i water his love
he bought the lady dancers and gave them a look instead
to my eyes he pushed and crazied me up
i fell on the edge he never held me up
even though i hated his ways
he stares and loves only on anniversary days
i layed on him with flowers galore
he shoved and raged my anger even more
but still i watch from the side of his gaze
and i wonder how anybody can watch him die away
to me hes there and my heart is stll aware
to him i stare and his heart i keep it there
and now i see how he blooms each day
because hes the most beautiful garden
the most beautiful garden spoiled upon daisies
2007-03-02 04:47:24 · 5 answers · asked by SugaLova 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
Ive read alot of poetry on this q&a and most of it is horrid. I really like this one. Its very deep and has emotions splattered all over it. I like your style and the way that you put it all out there but hid it in "the garden". You have some tallent and I think you should consider doing more with it. Use a little puncuation because that will help you to break the poem up a bit and give it that extra kick you are looking to show. I love the line "I understand the way I water his love" thats a great line and you have so many hidden meanings here. I would love to see more of your work. I think that you may get some negative feedback on this one because I think it may go right over some peoples heads but dont listen to them this poem is good.
2007-03-02 07:08:57 · answer #1 · answered by shadowsthathunt 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is really good!!! I love it. You can tell you put your heart and soul into it!!! You are a really good poet. I would love to read more of your poems!!! Keep on keeping on with these good poems
2007-03-02 20:44:58 · answer #2 · answered by i love chris brown 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's compellingly demented. I like it.
2007-03-02 15:07:36 · answer #3 · answered by Drew 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its good
2007-03-02 15:41:16 · answer #4 · answered by Inahzi13 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
don't like it-sorry
2007-03-02 14:21:45 · answer #5 · answered by WhyY 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋