Where has my sister gone?
We used to have such fun.
Locked away inside her mind,
Crazed words fly from her mouth
With the intent to injure,
Always hitting their mark.
Where has my sister gone?
Now I’m all alone.
All the fun we used to have,
A thing of the distant past.
Now we’re archenemies,
Living in the same house.
2007-03-01 03:41:51 · 8 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
Its good, sounds like you are missing your sister to me, sisters can do this stuff when growing up, It should change again when you get older, but why not let her read it?
She may need someone to talk to! that might be you!
Hope it gets better good luck
2007-03-01 03:49:48 · answer #1 · answered by Me 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It was cool. You migh want to broaden the language. Go deeper, nothing wrong with a better choice of vocabulary.
6 out of ten
2007-03-01 11:48:04 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it a lot. It stirred a lot of emotions in me.
It reminds me a lot of my relationship I had with my older sister when we were growing up. She started becoming popular in school and i felt left behind.
The good news is that we are now great friends!
2007-03-01 12:06:21 · answer #3 · answered by Libby 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It was good except for the parts about your sister.
2007-03-01 11:45:10 · answer #4 · answered by John Blix 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋
a bit "high schoolish". Sounds like your feeling sorry for yourself. You should try giving her a hug.
2007-03-01 11:50:03 · answer #5 · answered by Underdog 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is good poem.
This a sad poem.
Keep it up.
2007-03-01 11:50:43 · answer #6 · answered by gmude2000 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its cool, a little sad, but cool!
2007-03-01 11:46:05 · answer #7 · answered by Melissaaaa. 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its really very nice..
2007-03-02 09:20:08 · answer #8 · answered by S . Sushmita 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋