Sometimes I think the whole world has gone crazy, but then again maybe it's just me. Everyone wished for the perfect life, some people got it, I wasn't one of those people. I was sitting on a plane as it soared over the glistening water of the vast Atlantic. London, England was where I was headed, to see my dad whom I had visited every summer since I was four years old. After visiting England every summer for thirteen years, you would think I thought of it as maybe a second home or something like that. No, that's not what I thought at all. I loved London, I truly did, but it just wasn't MY place. I didn't feel like I would ever get my perfect life, or my happily ever after there. The busy streets, the brain-racketting noises, they're great, except you get used to them, maybe even to used to them. I really didn't know what to expect in London. Even though it seemed like I had it all worked out in my mind, London was so different from Phoenix.
2007-02-28 17:43:17 · 7 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
I want the rest of the story to have a little romance, and magic. Magic, I am really into fantasy, but like Harry Potter and Twilight and New Moon. Stephenie Meyer gave my my inspiration for this book, except I don't want it to be too much like hers. I could use some help on that part. I want her to go to school, find a couple of people, fall in love and then have to get whisked away into the world of magic. I don't want it to sound to much like Stephenie Meyer's Twilight book though. Even though that is my favorite book in the whole world.
2007-02-28 17:46:25 · update #1
When I said, "find a couple of people" I meant like find a group of people (three to be exact) one girl and two boys. And have her fall in love with one of the boys....thats what I meant.
2007-02-28 17:52:21 · update #2
Brain hurts... too many commas...
Your writing is great, but just make sure you have it edited before you send it off.
I do have some actual criticism though and take it for what it is, but your voice in the piece fluctuates. One sentence it sounds like one person is talking, and in the next someone else is. If a lot of description isn't natural for you, don't add it. I know there's a lot of self-help books for writers and it says to use as much description as possible, but that's a bunch of hooey. You're writing contemporary fiction here, not something from Emmerson's time. Writing is alive and you should treat it as such. Write in a way that makes you happy, not what you think others would do.
As for as your story ideas, may I suggest joining a writer's group? Try registering to www.writerscafe.org. Trust me, it's a good site.
Best of luck to you and may your words flow onto the page like water from Victoria Falls.
2007-03-01 02:05:40 · answer #1 · answered by uncletoon2005 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Well, having been to Phoenix, I think you have a great start so far. I don't know if the word "brain-racketting" can be found in any dictionary, but I get the idea. Maybe on the plane your character can spot another teenager (I take it she is 17) and asks about a school uniform or something, then finds out they are in the same school or something, or maybe the other teenager has just heard of the school she is going to be in and says something like they have a great swimming team. Then when your character starts school she might decide to check out the swim team and meets the love interest, and maybe he offers to give her some pointers, but when they are swimming something happens in the far end of the swimming pool - a vortex of some kind - and they are both pulled into an alternate universe - either the same one or a different one for each which overlap once in a while, so they keep trying to figure out how to get back out. Good luck.
2007-03-01 01:53:29 · answer #2 · answered by Cookie777 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think you listed some really good sources of inspiration. Try just thinking freely on it for a while and don't let anyone knock your ideas.
Looks like you are on a roll, just keep rolling and best of luck. You already have places and a person, just keep on going and think of the constrasts and why she (he) is on the plane. Where are they going? What will they do when they get there? Will they go back and forth from one place to another or stay in one city for a while? What happens when they get off the plane? Ask yourself the questions and let your spirit free to answer.
Good luck!
2007-03-01 01:55:40 · answer #3 · answered by inzaratha 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is a good start. Definitely would make me want to read it if I were to pick it up at a bookstore.
2007-03-01 10:05:52 · answer #4 · answered by buttercuppeepersgilda 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
dear lily dont be sily . Dont ask question like this what u think write that in your book,ok.
2007-03-01 01:53:02 · answer #5 · answered by thakur_pawan73 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I alredy wrote the story.
2007-03-08 16:52:22 · answer #6 · answered by Pedro M 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like the beginning but i don't no what should happen next.
2007-03-07 15:34:32 · answer #7 · answered by peanutdurof 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋