What happened?
Weren't we friends?
What happend friends to the end?
When they lied, I cried
You believed them over me
Your so called "best friend"
Isn't friendship made out
of trust?
I miss our friendship,
we were as close as
dirt near the light green grass?
Or were we as close as the sun is
from us?
I miss your comforting words of,
'its ok'
We were supposed to be friends
to the end.
I cried every night,
wishing, hoping you will call
me,
saying sorry,
telling me that we will always
be friends.
It has been a year now,
I feel like a baby,
cryin at night,
But I guess now.
our friendsship now is
the end.
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as you can tell, this is about a "close" friendship of 8 years, which I dearly miss.
I have been crying myself to sleep alot since then. I really miss her! Also, people would lie to
her saying I said stuff about her,and she so would believe people she "disliked" over me,
and plz rate 1-10
1 being low, 10 being highest
2007-02-28 14:17:46 · 12 answers · asked by toxic0candy 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
I quite liked it. I thought that some of the metaphysical imagery was particularly effective. Interesting rhythmic devices too, which seemed to counterpoint the surrealism of the underlying metaphor of the humanity of the poet's compassionate soul, which contrives through the medium of the verse structure to sublimate this, transcend that, and come to terms with the fundamental dichotomies of the other and one is left with a profound and vivid insight into whatever it was the poem is about!
2007-02-28 14:22:58 · answer #1 · answered by ThinkaboutThis 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
10!!! ur poem is really good and i can relate 2 it A LOT!!!!1 only mine is a relationship of a year tht was great and ended the other day and now i've been crying 2 sleep...nyways agian ur poem is really good
2007-03-02 11:13:46 · answer #2 · answered by Laur 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Three thumbs up, meaning a 10!
2007-02-28 14:21:59 · answer #3 · answered by ? 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
2 - I like your dirt image, but the majority of your poem is rather whiny. Think about expressing the same sentiments but don't address "you." I think you'll find that you can write a much richer poem.
2007-02-28 14:22:58 · answer #4 · answered by God_Lives_Underwater 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It was a really nice poem & I would give it an 8, because it's a true story and you put your heart into this poem.♥
2007-02-28 14:23:40 · answer #5 · answered by Sazziable 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
about an 6 love. its pretty good but without the bit down the bottom telling me wot it woz about i wouldnt have known. good meaningful words though. well done
2007-02-28 14:25:11 · answer #6 · answered by chelsieleej 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
9.5. thought it was really good but it sounded more like you were friends with someone then you guys became boyfriend and girlfriend and then you guys broke up and now you want to get back with this person. but i realy liked it.
2007-02-28 14:27:19 · answer #7 · answered by nat 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
8, it conveys your feelings, I just take off 2 for sad factor...I hope you and your friend make up and wish you the best...
2007-02-28 14:23:28 · answer #8 · answered by Matt N 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
well, its a good poem. i like it. 7 from me.! .i like the feelings and eveything, but try not to repeat too much...it sounds, like sum1 sed bfor, whiny.
just a bit of editing, and its perfect.
give it to your friend!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! hope errthin works out
2007-02-28 14:34:23 · answer #9 · answered by pitchaya. 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is my other screen name with some more of my poems!
2007-03-02 14:37:07 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋