Rate my poem please! 1-10 1 being bad and 10 being good?

Question

THE UNKNOWN
A razorblade in one hand,
Thirty pills in the other.
Listening to my favorite band,
Singing about killing another.

Sitting on the bathroom sink,
Music turned up high
Really starting to think,
How much I want to die

Feeling the blade slice through my skin,
The lead singer hitting a high note.
Popping all thirty pills, I begin
To feel them slide down my throat.

Seeing the light begin to haze over,
The blade cutting deep,
Knowing my life was a cover,
I started to weep.

I was never what people truly thought
Always hiding beneath the guise.
The real me they always sought,
But I had a great disguise.

I acted like a preppy chic,
A gothic vamp,
Sometimes a country hick,
Even like a city tramp.

No one knew the real me,
It never showed through,
I guess it was hard for me,
To show myself to you.

I wanted to hide away,
Never see daylight,
Cuz my heart every day
Got blacker and blacker like night.

So sitting there in the dark,
I finally made myself known.
I was the girl, who left my mark,
But fading in the unknown.

**I don't really feel this way, it's just my style of poetry**

Answer 1

Remember this is my opinion. And truthfully I am not a big fan of rhyming poetry. However, this poem is really good. I like the emotions. It would be better though if you tied those emotions to something that the reader wouldnt expect. Some of your rhymes seem forced (thats why I dont like rhyming poetry). I write poems that are dark like this one and prefer them to happy go lucky poems. I dont suggest you turn this in to a teacher though because truthfully they will send you to the counselor. Been there done that. I would give this poem a 7 because its got great potential and its a wonderful subject matter full of emotion, it could just use a little work like all writing does. Keep on writing these great poems.

Answer 2

Listen, all those feelings are not poetry. Weep for the dead. 10.
Here is a good analogy, when GOD suffers every day and
happens to own the mall, all he gets is chix working it and not
turking any at all. Save some of yourself for the weekend of
something that will be put on a shelf. Make something besides
idols, I have seen most of the topten musicians and I am not
impressed. Though we are not supposed to be mute, we are supposed to share. This is called mute bell an ancient style of
idylls that sang to themselves then ran thru chicken gas to stir
up the weather. Really you have permission to do something
without thinking great powerfull acts, try rollerskating. http://www.beliefnet.com

Answer 3

That's good that you don't actually feel that way…The poem didn't make me cry, however, my eyes did tear quite a bit. None the less-as a poetry writer, I'd have to rate your poem a 10. In my opinion, it was well written, had good body and structure.

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Answer 4

I give your poem a 7. I like the images in your poem very much. I think you convey feelings of despair and suicide well. A lot of people have felt like this, so I think there is an universal quality in your poem.

Answer 5

I like them. Those of the kinds of poems I used to write. I'd give them a 9.

Answer 6

wow this was real deep. im a writer myself but this was really intense and i give u mad props
keep up the good writing
8.5

Answer 7

Awesome, amazing you are like T.S Elliot

Answer 8

that was amazing it is a ten but if it is for a grade i wouldnt turn it in because then the teacher would think you are sudicidal

Answer 9

Nice rhyme and rhythm...6

Answer 10

both of them deserve a 9 and a half.