constructive criticism is fine, i need advice as it is, but I feel free to praise to if you want. Here's some lyrics that I have written. If you have time please stop by http://blog.myspace.com/index.cfm?fuseaction=blog.ListAll&friendID=140749405 and read the others, if it won't let you read it, send a request and I'll accept but I really need public opinion
Estranged
I'm lost in myself
Where do I go?
What do I do?
'Cause I just don't know
My veins are cut loose
And now I am free
But is who I'm now
Who I want to be?
Chorus:
I feel Estranged
Where am I now?
I feel so deranged
And I can't allow
These feelings inside
To take control
'Cause I am so lost
And I am so cold
I feel Estranged
What's wrong with me?
I'm just not myself
Could someone please tell me
Why my life is hell
I can't find my way
In my own mind
I hear the clock ticking
Do I still have time?
Bridge :
Hey Mirrorman do you know the way home?
I'm losin' my mind
and I'm all alone
2007-02-28 13:19:14 · 8 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music
The words are pretty good... but until you put them to music, it's just a poem. Not a song. Try writing some music, if you're instrumentally talented.
2007-02-28 13:27:18 · answer #1 · answered by Samantha 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
hey that was pretty good. i think it needs a little work on the lyrics cuz their to easy. but ur a good writer keep it up id listen to it if it was a song.
2007-02-28 13:30:06 · answer #2 · answered by Alice Cullen 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think there pretty good, especially if ur considering a career in the music industry- GOOD-LUCK!!!
2007-02-28 13:25:37 · answer #3 · answered by BRENDA B 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
they sound okay, but very easy to understand. I like lyrics that you have to try and decode, lyrics that can mean different things to different people
but yeah its good, i couldnt do any better!
2007-02-28 13:22:38 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
i like it yet i in my view trust him, i think of which you may desire to alter sand to sunlight because of the fact its style of complicated if somebody doesnt be responsive to what youre conversing approximately, perhaps related to the coastline? because of the fact in any different case its complicated in case you dont have a minimum of one greater small connection with what youre conversing approximately. yet in any different case marvelous! :)
2016-09-30 01:06:44 · answer #5 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it is good, I can relate to what you are saying.
2007-02-28 13:26:31 · answer #6 · answered by melissa n 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
deep luv it im a songwriter myself and that is DEEP
2007-02-28 13:38:06 · answer #7 · answered by Lovey dovey cuddlekins 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like it
2007-02-28 13:27:46 · answer #8 · answered by closeinphilly 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋