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I need you guys to help me edit my paper and help me find a good ending to put on it. To Kill or Not to Kill
The big topic that has been discussed over and over is Abortion. People have many opinions on whether it is right or wrong. My opinion on abortion is that it is wrong and is killing millions of innocent unborn babies. Something that I was appalled by was that some of the pro-choice people say these unborn babies can not feel pain. It has been proven in the womb that babies can feel pain from abortion. This is also demonstrated in the movie “silent scream”. Babies in the womb can feel pain as early as 12 weeks ( Guernsey 12). In the Silent Scream it shows a real baby on an ultrasound being killed by an abortion. In those seconds before it happened you could see the babies’ arms flail and the heart start to beat faster. Those are signs that a living person is starting to panic. Then the baby will open its mouth in a silent scream of pain. That is there last scream of help

before there gone.
Some people say that the babies in the womb aren’t really “alive”. But really they start to live, grow and feel long before birth. The babies’ heart will start to beat before the end of the first month of pregnancy ( Guernsey 24). And all of there body systems are working by the time it has only been in the womb for two months (Lowenstein 46).
Many people say that abortion is a “last resort”. If they really are then why are 40% of all people that have abortions have them again ( Guernsey 12). Is this really a last resort or a form of birth control? It has also been proven that 1 out of 3 women that have abortions have it because someone else wanted them to ( Guernsey 17). So is this really the woman’s choice? Some pro-choice

Some pro-choice people also say that woman should have a choice if they’ve been raped or the victim of incest. Yet only 1% of women have an abortion because of rape or incest. 70% of these women think it would be “Just another act of violence perpetrated against their bodies.”
There are also the emotion and physical factors to abortion which can last a lifetime. Most women are 6 times more likely to commit suicide after an abortion (Bachiochi 68). There regret is so deep within them. So often times they can’t bear to live with the fact that they killed there child.

. For instance Jackie Bakkar who had an abortion said “Nobody told me about the pain I would feel deep within, causing nightmares and deep depressions.” 40 and 60% of women say they have negative emotional effects as a result of an abortion.
Some pro-choice people believe that an abortion would be safer then natural birth. But really it has been proven that if you have an abortion you will be 4 times more likely to die then from a natural birth. There are also over one hundred complications that can result. There are many short-term effects but there are also many long-term effects. 10% of women that have abortions suffer from complications. You also have a higher chance of getting breast cancer. The abortion won’t only be very painful for the baby but very painful for you too.

Answer 1

as far as edits go, you really might want to check your homophones (they're, their, there etc.) Also, work on your introduction.


You really want something to draw people in, such as ...

"Imagine starting out in the womb, but suddenly, there is no more life. It is slowly being taken away. Your arms flail, to no avail. Your heart beats faster. There has to be something you can do, you think. But there isn't because someone else made that decision for you."

And as endings go, use a couple of sentences that thoroughly cover and close your topic.

"In conclusion, abortions aren't to be taken lightly. They not only affect the mother, but it takes a life. It is murder."

From one student to another, good luck, and I hope that i helped you. Use these examples as you wish.

Answer 2

Every woman has the right to choose should be the title