I am 54 years old and my wife died when she was 51 years old. She loves me so much. I don't have any feelings for her. We have been together for at least 30+ years. I never had children with her but I did started having sex with her since I was 28 years old. She died from an accident. I didn't kill her. I told her "I love you" countless times. My feelings for her wasn't that deep. If I left her, I won't have anymore sex and she'll be heartbroken and I will start paying for child support if she did got pregnant. I never fell in love with her. If I did fell in love with her, I know I will be very sad right now, but good thing I didn't fell in love with her. I can imagine myself leaving her and not being sad. I don't feel bad at all for her death. I had to pretend to be crying on her funeral to let her family think that I am sad. To be honest, I am not sad. Before she died, she said, "I am very happy to have meet you in my life." When she was alive, I treated her like a queen.
2007-02-28 02:06:35 · 2 answers · asked by Ansem 1 in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
I am 54 years old, (COMMA) and my wife died when she was 51 years old. She loves me so much. I don't have any feelings for her. We have been together for at least 30+ years. I never had children with her, (COMMA) but I did start(NO 'ed' on start) having sex with her since(Use the word WHEN instead of SINCE) I was 28 years old. She died from an accident. I didn't kill her. I told her "I love you" countless times. My feelings for her wasn't (Use WEREN'T instead of WASN'T) that deep. If I left her, I won't (Use WOULDN'T instead of WON'T) have anymore sex , (COMMA) she'll (Use SHE'D or SHE WOULD instead of SHE'LL) be heartbroken, (COMMA) and I will (Use WOULD instead of WILL) start paying for child support if she did got (GET, not GOT) pregnant. I never fell in love with her. If I did fell (FALL, not FELL) in love with her, I know I will (Use WOULD instead of WILL) be very sad right now, but good thing I didn't fell (FALL, not FELL) in love with her. I can imagine myself leaving her and not being sad. I don't feel bad at all for her death. I had to pretend to be crying on her funeral to let her family think that I am sad. To be honest, I am not sad. Before she died, she said, "I am very happy to have meet (MET instead of MEET) you in my life." When she was alive, I treated her like a queen.
I put corrections in parenthesis for you to consider changing. Also, if this is for a class or some thing, I would consider not using contractions. Use would not in stead of wouldn't, etc. Hope this helps.
2007-02-28 02:20:13 · answer #1 · answered by country_girl 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Okay, there are lots of grammar mistakes. The problem with the above writing is not the grammar so much as the lack of clarity of thought. You need to read this yourself and ask yourself for whom it is written. It reads like self-justification and seems to serve no purpose. If it is your diary, read it back and look at the tenses. If it is not a diary, there is too much information.
You use present tense for a wife who is deceased.
This passage is too big for editing in "Answers".
2007-02-28 02:19:39 · answer #2 · answered by grapeshenry 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋