Im writting a descriptive writting story and I need help describing something?

Question

I need to make this more appealing:

"As I woke up to a loud buzzing alarm clock at 9:00 am on a Wednesday morning, I remember thinking to myself today was finally the day I was going to get my nose pierced.

Answer 1

I awoke (or woke) to the dull, repetitive sounds of my continuous alarm clock at 9 o'clock. I lazily flopped my arm on it. It stopped, but the sound lingered in my ears. Strong rays of light shone through my window, making it rather difficult for me to open my eyes. I lay half asleep, trying to finish off the dream I'd been having. It had been quite a good dream; something to do with rings. At the thought of this, a sudden, sharp feeling of happiness mingled with fear had shot through me. A small smile spread across my face, the only sign that had shown I was awake. Today, I recall thinking to myself, after enduring months of waiting, I'd be getting my nose pierced!


(sorry, the end parts kind of weird, i got really confused with the tenses)

Answer 2

Well, it may be a little over dramatic, and needs some work, but here goes:

The loud buzz of the alarm clock could not disturb my dream, for my dream was no trifle, but a conscious yearning which has recently waxed with increasing ability and flooded my mind day and night relentlessly--but no more! Today this chapter of anticipation waned, once again as time tenderly revealed its precious ability to satisfy, and by tomorrow I would have embarked on some new journey in endless effort again to quench my insatiable appetite--again to fuel this ostensibly perpetual cycle of desire, work and reward. But tomorrow would bring its own worries, so I allowed myself to drift from my road to infinity, and instead focused on the little bits that make up this road.

Wednesday, 9:00 AM; I endeavored to make this moment last forever. As I gazed at the monotone display of my dreaded alarm clock--which every other morning I curse--but here, now, lighted anew, I pondered this newfound bliss. Today bore a much-awaited gift--one of those finite sparks which drives our sanity; that little reward which entices us along life's winding way. Today I was getting my nose pierced.

Answer 3

as i woke up to my blue, loud buzzing alarm clock, i noticed it was a hot ans sunny wednesday morning. With my blood pumpin brain, i realized it was the the special day of my long time in wait nose piercing. i got up out my comfortable full size bed and step into my fluffy slippers...........

u can do the rest

Answer 4

I would say maybe :' today feels different, today I will do something for me ' or something like that and then later introduce nose piercing