I thought you relli luved me,
but i think i was mistaken
i thought you really could see
i cant stand by whom you're taken
so excuse these words and excuse my actions
cuz you rather give her satisfaction
and if you ever forget, or misunderstand
I'll always be here to take your hand
I'll pull you out, and let you free
until one day you finally see
my life is a wreck and very corrupt
to make it all better, you can simply break up.
[[with her]]
2007-02-27 09:48:21 · 5 answers · asked by ducksgomoo22 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Philosophy
Very good! Just remeber that when you write the real 1, write with REAL spelling.
2007-02-27 09:54:44 · answer #1 · answered by nat b 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
not to bad at all :) get the spelling right tho.it is easy to see where your coming from,write a few more,you have a knack i think.
2007-02-27 18:15:49 · answer #2 · answered by TOM 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's pretty good. You have a talent. Keep working on it. I really like the end: "with her."
2007-02-27 18:27:30 · answer #3 · answered by Lesley M 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
great job rhyming!!! i like it but if you are trying to be like Langston hughes or something then im srry you have a long way to go.
but i REALLY do like it.
2007-02-27 18:33:23 · answer #4 · answered by <3pirate 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
not bad, not GREAT, but i can see the value in what your saying.
2007-02-27 18:12:43 · answer #5 · answered by Devone 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋