Can Someone proofreed/ help me with this speech?

Question

Improving Japanese American Relations:
かんけいはじせくないけどとてもすごくないです。
かんけいのもんだいはぶんめいおわかりません。
にほんじんはＡｍｅｒｉｃａがあぶないとおもいいます。
Ａｍｅｒｉｃａじんはにほんがへんとおもいいます。
にほんとあめりかのがくせいがもっとあったら、もっとおたがいにわかりあえる。
りゆがくせいおふえたらいいです。
Ａｍｅｒｉｃａのこうこうはにほんごじゅぎようおふえたらいいです。
にほんじんはうれしくないのでＡｍｅｒｉｃａのきちがあります。
にほんじんとＡｍｅｒｉｃａのぐんはかんけいをよくなたらいいです。
Ａｍｅｒｉｃａのぐんをへらすたらもっとかんげいします。
Ａｍｅｒｉｃａのぐんのよさんをへらたらいいです。
Ａｍｅｒｉｃａのかんけいのよさんをふえたらいいです。
Finally, I need a closing statement like "If we did all of this, we could have a closer relationship. This could be beneficial for both of us." Can someone help me translate that?

Answer 1

There are some sentences I don't understand. Write it in English to make sure what you want to say.

Answer 2

some of the sentances are very confusing, and probably shouldnt be said in a speech ie."they think theyre weird' and 'they think America is dangerous' etc. because its very general, I would only use that if I had a quote of some sort. Anyway, maybe you want your last sentance to be
もしこれをやってみったらにほんと　あめりかがよりよいかんけいをつくることができるとおもいます
それがみなさまにとってよいことだとおもいます。
I left if in hiragana for you so its easier to read. Hope its okay.

ps。its cutting off the sentance so Ill just put it in hiragana
'moshi kore o yattemittara nihon to america ga yoriyoi kankei o tsukuru koto ga dekiru to omoimasu.
sore ga minasama ni totte yoi koto dato omotteimasu.

Answer 3

I had attended speech contests in Japan when I was there..I enjoyed listening to these speeches, I think too, yours is bit confusing and using the same words again and again..You have to give both good impressions to these two countries and their ties, are you referring to their systems of schools or government or the military? Try as much as possible to give more reasons why they should have a close ties ...and why these would help benefit each countries...
Be aware that not only Japanese would hear this incase,but most foreigners are interested with what you would like to express, try to go to library and read how to make a speech format or ask any of your group to listen to your speech first and let you know how they would respond...I believe you would present a good speech after having idea of how to format a speech.
I could not help much but Twikfat has mentioned what is needed to changed...
good day!

Answer 4

i wanna help you, so i appriciate if you could post your english draft*