ENGLISH TEACHER! HELP!! correct my grammar?

Question

Here are my writting. ( i am preparing my interview , you know I want perform very well, so plz correct my words)
My background:
I graduated from Chuan-Shang medical university in 1997. At the same year, I passed OT national exams to get my OT license. At the first 2 years, I started to work in the Rehab Hospital which were very good for me to enhance my skills quickly in OT field , coz we have many patients with different diagnose and we had case presentation and case conference every week, and every staff needs to do teaching too which means undergraduate students, seniors come to your OT room, you demo ,teach and explain ,supervise them how to provide treatments. So I feel after these 2 years work experience , my basis knowledge in OT field was solid.
After that, I moved back my city to work. And at the beginning, I work in the Hospital too, but I feel like I did get as many new experiences as what I got in the previous Hospital and my job became so routine…So I decided to change my work environment , to work at special educational resource center which belongs to our county government. I like this job very much, coz It is not only direct intervention to children , but I also were responsible of establishing rehab system into public schools in my county. Therefore, my role in my job became very diversification. I become OT instructor, demonstrating special teachers how to do therapy in their classroom. I become a teacher, giving many speeches about how to dealing with special needs students , according the aspect of OT. I become a consultant, answering any questions related to students from regular teachers, special teachers, principles, special education professors, and client’s family.

Answer 1

I graduated from Chuan-Shang medical university in 1997. The same year, I passed the Occupational Therapy (OT) National Exams to get my OT license. During my first two years, I started to work in the Rehab Hospital, a great place for me to enhance my OT skills quickly. We had many patients with different diagnoses and we had case presentations and case conferences every week. Every staff member was required to teach as well. Undergraduate seniors came to my OT room, and I demonstrated, taught, explained , and supervised how they provided treatments. I feel after these 2 years of work experience , my basic knowledge in OT field was solid.
After that, I moved back my city to work. In the beginning, I worked in the (WHICH?) Hospital too, but I feel like I didn't get as many new experiences as I received at the previous Hospital. My job became very routine, so I decided to change my work environment to work at special educational resource center which belongs to our county government. I liked this job very much, because it was not only direct intervention with children , but I also was responsible for establishing a rehab system in the public schools in my county. Therefore, my role became very diversified. I become an OT instructor, demonstrating special teachers how to do therapy in their classroom. I become a teacher, gave many speeches about how to deal with special needs students, according the aspects of OT. I became a consultant, answering any questions related to students from regular teachers, special education teachers, principals, special education professors, and clients' families.


A couple of things: Watch your tenses. You have the present and past mixed up in a few places.

The word "Coz" is not corrent in English. Always use "because"

Watch for run on sentences. Make sure there is only one complete thought for each sentence.

Answer 2

Try this:

My background:

I graduated from Chuan-Shang Medical University in 1997. In the same year, I passed OT national exams to get my license. During the first 2 years, I started to work in the Rehab Hospital; these years were very good for me, helping to enhance my skills in the OT field. We had many patients with different diagnoses as well as case presentations and case conferences weekly. Each staff member was expected to teach as well which meant undergraduate students and seniors came to your OT room where you demo, teach, explain and supervise the students on how to provide treatments.

After this 2-year experience, I moved back my home city to work. At the beginning, I worked in the Hospital there also but feel like I did not get many new experiences and my job was becoming routine. That led me to a decision to change my work environment and to work at the special educational resource center which belongs to our county government. I feel I am making a difference in this job which offers direct intervention with children and allowed me the responsibility of establishing a rehabilitation system in the public schools in my county. Therefore, my role in my job became very diverse as I became an OT instructor demonstrating to special teachers how to give therapy in their classrooms. I become a teacher, giving many speeches about how to dealing with special needs students, from the OT angle. I become a consultant, answering questions related to students from regular teachers, special education teachers, principals, special education professors, and client’s families.

Answer 3

I Only changed a few words that i spotted, the other ones are correct i believe?

I graduated from Chuan-Shang medical university in 1997. At the same year, I passed OT national exams to get my OT license. At the first 2 years, I started to work in the Rehab Hospital which were very good for me to enhance my skills quickly in OT field , BECAUSE we have many patients with different diagnose and we had case presentation and case conference every week, and every staff needs to do teaching too which means undergraduate students, seniors come to your OT room, you demo ,teach and explain ,supervise them how to provide treatments. So I feel after these 2 years work experience , my basis knowledge in OT field was solid.
After that, I moved back my city to work. And at the beginning, I work in the Hospital too, but I feel like I did get as many new experiences as what I got in the previous Hospital and my job became so routine…So I decided to change my work environment , to work at special educational resource center which belongs to our county government. I like this job very much, BECAUSE It is not only direct intervention to children , but I also were responsible of establishing rehab system into public schools in my county. Therefore, my role in my job became very diversification. (I BECAME A?) OT instructor, demonstrating special teachers how to do therapy in their classroom. I (became?) a teacher, giving many speeches about how to dealing with special needs students , according the aspect of OT. I (BECAME?) a consultant, answering any questions related to students from regular teachers, special teachers, principles, special education professors, and client’s family.

Answer 4

First, you need to spell out OT, rehab and coz.

I'm assuming that OT is occupational therapy
rehab is rehabilitation
coz is a slang for because.

That said here is my suggestions.

My background:
I graduated from Chuan-Shang medical university in 1997. At the same year, I passed O.T. national exams to get my O.T. license. At the first two years, I started to work in the Rehabilitation Hospital which was very good for me to enhance my skills quickly in O.T. field, coz we have many patients with different diagnose and we had case presentation and case conferences every week, and every staff needs to do teaching too, which means undergraduate students, seniors come to your O.T. room, you demo, teach and explain, supervise them how to provide treatments. So I feel after these two years work experience, my basis knowledge in O.T. field was solid.
After that, I moved back my city to work. And at the beginning, I work in the Hospital too, but I feel like I did get as many new experiences as what I got in the previous Hospital and my job became so routine . . . So I decided to change my work environment, to work at a special educational resource center which belongs to our county government. I like this job very much, because it is not only direct intervention to children, but I also was responsible of establishing rehabilitation system into public schools in my county. Therefore, my role in my job became very diversification. I become O.T. Instructor, demonstrating special teachers how to do therapy in their classroom. I become a teacher, giving many speeches about how to dealing with special needs students, according the aspect of O.T. I become a consultant, answering any questions related to students from regular teachers, special teachers, principles, special education professors, and client’s family.

Answer 5

Too long to fix, but be sure to explain what OT means.

Answer 6

first of all at the beginning of the second and third sentence take out the "at" and just start the sentece with "the" and it will sound more professional. and try to use more transition words like i began my education.... or since graduation......

Answer 7

It saddens me greatly to read your writing. Your written communication is very poor. Whatever job you get, make sure to take it upon yourself to improve your English skills or return to China.