Aura of the Rose
A single red rose rests upon a grand piano, relishing in its own delicate beauty. The room contains no walls, its boundaries are limitless. A rich, midnight black is present throughout the atmosphere. Though the room exists boundless, the rose possesses a divine aura which blossoms in the eyes of many. It signifies a vast number of things; Loneliness..Hope...Romance..Solitude... Yet, somewhere, with all its meanings, lies a hushed heavenly elegance.
(Please be honest with your constructive criticism)
2007-02-27 04:09:03 · 5 answers · asked by Kiara 5 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
READ BEFORE CRITIQUE: Sorry, after "romance.." it should be "solitude" NOT "so.."
2007-02-27 04:15:22 · update #1
No.. I'm not a professional writer... (I'm 14)
I don't plan to go into this profession, but writing will always be something I am very ardent about.
2007-02-27 04:16:07 · update #2
Beautiful description. The lush enviroment of a single room, stretching for eternity, with a piano and a single rose. I hope that you are a proffesional writer, because if not, you should definitely try that career out.
2007-02-27 04:14:11 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
There's musical quality to this brief scene, but it's a song I've heard MANY times before. The "rose" has almost no metaphoric quality anymore. It has been recycled millions upon millions of times by millions of writers.
You understand that language can be arranged lyrically. That is a talent no one can teach.
2007-02-27 12:31:54 · answer #2 · answered by God_Lives_Underwater 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Wow it's very good, I like it, I was actually imagining it as I read it. If you want more feedback from other poets and viewers try submitting your poem to www.poetry.com. It's really good.
2007-02-27 12:16:19 · answer #3 · answered by SOGWAP37 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
that's beautiful. I love it. being a room means it has to have boundries. no walls equals the universe
2007-02-27 12:13:20 · answer #4 · answered by discostu 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
WOW thats really really good.
2007-02-27 16:20:43 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋