Game
I was playing a game
On my papers scribbling my name
Pretending I have found fame
Others joined in my game
Pretending they knew my name
Acknowledging my fame
Others have played this game
Pretending everyone knew their name
Pretending they belonged to fame
2007-02-26 22:56:04 · 12 answers · asked by Analyst 7 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
it's ok, but the tenses are mixed up. have is present was is past, it makes it sound a bit wierd. I like it, but I don't think it's going to win first place in a contest, no offense. Not many can write that well anyway. LOL. Best of luck with your poem writing
2007-02-26 23:21:27 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Playing a game that everybody knows your name,
It is the same,
as Norm walking into Cheers,
to drink a beer!
Everybody wants to be famous,
Like the Chocolate King Amos,
Keep on playing the name game,
Maybe one day you will find fame!
2007-02-27 07:08:26 · answer #2 · answered by slickasaonion2 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
When all lines end the same
Regardless the strength of the frame
the cumulative effect is kinda lame
--Ain't that just like a dame?
2007-02-27 07:21:49 · answer #3 · answered by A Wand'ring Minstrel I 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Excellent!
2007-02-27 07:03:40 · answer #4 · answered by David H 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Simplistic.
2007-02-27 07:04:51 · answer #5 · answered by gaban24 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds too Dr. Seuss-ish to me
2007-02-27 11:51:28 · answer #6 · answered by txmom81 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yeah, some people appear in different faces and its hard to recognize unless you truly know yourself first.
2007-02-27 07:26:22 · answer #7 · answered by dates_ae 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
good poem 4 rising actors
2007-02-27 07:00:57 · answer #8 · answered by os 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
repetetive, also how does one belong to fame? It's ok.
2007-02-27 07:04:19 · answer #9 · answered by Mary G 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
just pretending.. that's the best part .. however is not such a great poem.. but it's a special one
2007-02-27 07:29:52 · answer #10 · answered by nobody100 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋