Oh enemy blade thats staring at me
Why do you torture me with this thought?
This could kill don't you see?
When all inside feeling begins to rot
You might understand why I choose to die
A long life would be too much to bear
Taking a shortcut instead of living a lie
I never needed anyone to care
I wrote it last night and finished some of it just now.Tell me what you think of it
2007-02-26 06:13:30 · 5 answers · asked by Anonymous in Society & Culture ➔ Other - Society & Culture
actually pretty good, but dude suicide??? My son's friend went into the backyard and put a 357 python under his chin and pulled the trigger and then let his parents find him.Gonna do it, at least don't let them find ya.
2007-02-26 06:27:29 · answer #1 · answered by bluesman999 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Some of the 'grammar' needs a lot of work ... but if I am reading your 'poem' correctly, you wrote it as your 'suicide note' and that is WRONG ... there are many people who 'care' about you and who want you to LIVE so that you can write more poetry and do other great things! You need to go to a mental health center and tell them that you are feeling 'suicidal' and get the help you need ... but be EXTREMELY CAREFUL because many of the 'drugs' prescribed for 'depression' can take away your 'creativity' and I think that in your case you would be far better off with just therapy to learn to 'control your own moods' and as little time on medication as possible so that you don't 'lose your creativity' and kill yourself because you 'can't write' any more.
2007-02-26 14:28:32 · answer #2 · answered by Kris L 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
sounds fine, go ahead an slash your wrists now.
2007-02-26 14:20:58 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
dark ,depressing, moody....
throw the knife away. please.
god bless!
2007-02-26 14:29:16 · answer #4 · answered by happy pilgrim 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it sounds suicidal, please don't kill yourself, someone cares about you.
2007-02-26 15:45:34 · answer #5 · answered by travelchic91 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋