I dont usually do this but...what do you think?

Question

She lay in the dark
Listening to her tumultuous thoughts
They weren’t thoughts of anything in particular
And perhaps some might call them fanciful
But they were her thoughts
And no one else’s.
She lay in the dark
Watching the shadows sway and swirl
Dancing soundlessly, gracefully around her room
They weren’t frightening, though certainly not friendly
But they were her shadows
And no one else’s.
She lay in the dark
Allowing her soul to wander free
To go where it wished and do what it would
And she never once doubted it would return
Because this was her soul
And no one else’s.
She lay in the dark
And felt the hand of her lover
Leave a burning trail over her cool skin
She left her thoughts to themselves
And left her shadows to their revelries
She left her soul still wandering free
And turned into his caress
Because this was his body
And no one else’s
For now…

Answer 1

As a retired English teacher I think it's great.
The repetition of the phrase "And no one else's" puts you in with the great communicators like Martin Luther King and his great, repetative, 'I have dream speech'.
The 'For now' adds reality, adds antici-pation. Many great films end with this little questiony bit.
Love it, publish it in local community paper. Become an author.

Answer 2

I think it is very good except for the last two words. If you truly feel those words fit I think you should be laying in the dark thinking a lot more, but alone...

Answer 3

I like it alot. I think the "For now..." is good too. It changes the tone of the poem from introspective to speculative. I think it's very good.

Answer 4

I think it's good except the "for now...." part.

Answer 5

Uh, well, the usual stuff in this section.

Answer 6

very good. even "for now" nothing lasts forever.

Answer 7

Don't ever do it again... That's what I think... for now!!!