Carry On
The fire within, how brightly it shines
Flickering madly, and growing with time
Tribulations come about, building character, depth
May hope abound until your final breath
Walk the path that nobody leaves
Abide in your toil until you’re relieved
With the cross that you bear write your name in the sand
Though your arms grow weary may your soul firmly stand
2007-02-23 13:22:44 · 8 answers · asked by Jenny 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
Your poem's description about your feeling about this subject of moving on is quite powerful, but some of your choice of words makes your poem unbalanced. Overall I'd say you might want to repeat, "carry on" in between your stanzas
2007-02-23 13:31:13 · answer #1 · answered by turquoiseseaeyes 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
gosh it sounds like a life-time in the past once you first published this. I enjoyed it then and nonetheless do! the authentic thank you to combine poetic minds is thru digital mail so each and every line or stanza is in respond to the previous one. good activity, good occasion of teamwork and training!!!!!!! thank you for sharing it back... ok, who gets this dance????
2016-12-14 04:18:37 · answer #2 · answered by libbie 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it is very good with lots of meaning behind.
2007-02-23 13:31:58 · answer #3 · answered by laughtime 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very Nice!!!
2007-02-23 13:32:14 · answer #4 · answered by megan 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
NO
I'd rather read the phone book you talentless kid
2007-02-23 13:27:09 · answer #5 · answered by Debbie D 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
"cross that you bear" I'm dead against cliches in poems...so, try harder next time.
2007-02-23 13:31:21 · answer #6 · answered by Desiree J 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
good but consider:
glowing with......
toil till............
leaves?
on the sand...........
soul.......standing?
2007-02-23 13:39:32 · answer #7 · answered by ari-pup 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
yes, cool...
2007-02-23 13:29:37 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋