The fire within, how brightly it shines
Flickering madly, and growing with time
Tribulations come about, building character, depth
May hope abound until your last breath
Walk the path that nobody leaves
Abide in your toil until you’re relieved
With the cross that you bear write your name in the sand
Though, your arms grow weary may your soul firmly stand
2007-02-23 05:56:26 · 6 answers · asked by Jenny 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
I haven't thought of a name yet
2007-02-23 06:17:13 · update #1
Ah, I like this. It's very good. Do come up with a name for it! :)
2007-02-23 06:36:20 · answer #1 · answered by Strawberry 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Nice poem, it has feeling and measure. Do lose the comma in the last line. I would give it an eight out of ten.
2007-02-23 15:57:11 · answer #2 · answered by B Scott 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Whats the name of it? And I agree with Robert S, lose the comma.
2007-02-23 14:04:52 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Lose the comma after the word "Though" in the last line.
2007-02-23 14:01:03 · answer #4 · answered by Crossing the Rubicon 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
not bad, what's the name of it?
2007-02-23 14:11:11 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I like it.........
2007-02-23 14:05:40 · answer #6 · answered by nemofish 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋