If you kill whales, i hope you go pale,
As you slowly sharpen your ready for the kill i hope you spill your empty heart full of tears onto the whale as you go pale!
2007-02-22 19:56:09 · 9 answers · asked by Katja ie tattybow 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
Lou B, Can you give me a link to there email!
2007-02-22 20:00:47 · update #1
I have continued writing this is what i have came up with:
If you kill whales, i hope you go pale,
As you slowly sharpen your ready for the kill i hope you spill your empty heart full of tears onto the whale as you go pale!
As it lays there after a while her loverly blubbery skin goes hard, and then you start blubbering, you are mentally scared!
You look into it big eyes and you can hear it's moans and cries, and it maked you want to die!
2007-02-22 21:02:00 · update #2
As I said elswhere, I am persuded to observe that, you have a poetic mind, mien and calling. You are skilled skilled in playing with words to convey what you want them to convey. (kill whales with harpoons!)
Greenpeace International deals with environmental conservation, especially the oceans, whales and all.
This is their website:
2007-02-22 20:33:00 · answer #1 · answered by ari-pup 7 · 1⤊ 1⤋
For me a poem has to have rhythm. It would not inevitably could rhyme even nonetheless it desires to hit my thoughts. i think of clarity of expression is substantial as properly. i do no longer prefer to 2d guess what i'm examining approximately. I continually seem for what I term "poetic gem stones"interior the text fabric.
2016-11-25 01:29:35 · answer #2 · answered by steffi 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yeh! it is great! And the oak is right she is great!
She could be a profesional poet 1 day!
2007-02-23 01:42:54 · answer #3 · answered by fitgirl099 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
No Sorry, It needs a bit more ooomph, lol, It needs more description, lol,
IF YOU KILL WHALES,
I HOPE YOU GO PALE,
THEY ARE PROTECTED
YOU GO TO JAIL,,,,
lol, try again.
2007-02-22 20:00:39 · answer #4 · answered by tinytazzie25 2 · 2⤊ 1⤋
It's pretty good.
And it will touch alot of people's hearts, coz I for one, really hate what's happening out there!
2007-02-22 21:14:49 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very very good. I like it. Send it to Greenpeace. Well done. x
#edit# Unfortunately tatty...I can't do links. I don't know how to. Duh!. Just google Greenpeace. I'm sure it will come up with something.
All the people pulling you down on here.......say this to them...
If you don't stand up for something, you will lie down for anything.
xxxx
2007-02-22 19:58:51 · answer #6 · answered by lou b 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
It's a start.......hope you catch up with Lou
2007-02-22 20:01:56 · answer #7 · answered by superbird 4 · 1⤊ 1⤋
good that you mentioned in the title that it is a poem
2007-02-22 20:01:07 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 2⤋
I don't get it, sorry :-(
2007-02-22 19:59:03 · answer #9 · answered by xander 5 · 1⤊ 1⤋