My thoughts are like dreams.
But they never come true.
My thoughts are like dreams.
They go on and on and on.
Different colors different things.
Different thoughts.
They are like dreams.
My mind controls me, my life and the world.
Dead roses.
Dead.
The world is gone.
All because of my thoughts
2007-02-22 14:54:22 · 18 answers · asked by Anonymous in Social Science ➔ Psychology
it is great but a little dark...i know what you are trying to express though....i gotcha back sister
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2007-02-22 15:02:34 · answer #1 · answered by redhead 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Keep it up. Write while you're on a roll, because someday you might lose interest. The poems you are creating now will have meaning to you later in life, so hold on to them, collect them in journals, value them. Write! Write! Write!
2007-02-22 23:02:11 · answer #2 · answered by TicK 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I don't understand what you are trying to convey. Perhaps it is "the illusion of central position?" However, the ending is suddenly negative, and doesn't explain any point.
2007-02-22 23:17:27 · answer #3 · answered by mindshift 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hey!!! Dont die just like that, you are only 14!!! The poem was great up till then!
2007-02-26 17:05:48 · answer #4 · answered by just me 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I dont get it...because if thoughts are like dreams..and the world is gone because of thoughts....then the world is gone because of dreams?!
2007-02-22 23:00:01 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
the beggining, like the first 7 lines, are great! the rest is not that great , but good enough
2007-02-22 22:58:19 · answer #6 · answered by anonymous 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Bravo!
2007-02-22 22:56:45 · answer #7 · answered by Roland 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
uhh what do dreams have to do with thoughts... in that form... but other than that you got "it" work on your topics kid and you might be able to do something better
2007-02-22 23:04:22 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Simon says it is Dreadful,and stay in school
2007-02-22 22:57:19 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
wow! That was great!! Your only 14?!?! do you have any more poems I could read? Thast awesome!!
Like my person? I made it up too!
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2007-02-22 22:57:41 · answer #10 · answered by dinosaur hunter 2 · 1⤊ 1⤋