please sombody proof read this... (little long..)?

Question

We are living in a world where people kill each other. To stop the killing we kill people who kill other people. It sounds awful and barbaric but this is how it’s done. Death penalty is needed everywhere because it is the most effective punishment for people who committed a murder, or a serious crime. “Death and Justice” by Edward Koch explains well why capital punishment is needed and what will happen if we don’t have a capital punishment and I strongly agree to the author that death penalty is needed.
I agree with the capital punishment because there is just no way to punish the people who committed the serious murder or other terrible crimes. Some say that they disagree with the capital punishment because it’s too barbaric and there are other ways to punish them enough. I agree on the fact that it’s barbaric and inhumane, but this is needed because if we want to punish the serious killers by just putting them in a jail for their life, what difference would it make? Yes, we are keeping them out of our society and make our life safer but we have to think about what that criminal might think while he/she is in the jail. They might actually enjoy, because they just killed a person and still living in a jail, eating food, and making friends. If we officially say that all the capital punishment is banned from this world, all the criminals out there might think that worst thing could happen by killing someone would be just going to a jail and to keep these people in the prison, government needs money and where do they get the money? It’s from our taxes. I don’t understand why we need to pay taxes to keep the criminals in the prison. They could have taken our family’s life and if that happens, not a lot of people who are victim’s family would have such a forgiving and understanding mind. We want them to commune with themselves and feel sorry for what they have done. But how do we know that they actually feel sorry and sad for what they have done? Putting them in a jail for their life is not enough. They took a precious life away and it can be paid with only with their own life. They have to understand taking somebody’s life is a serious thing. We don’t want to put the idea of killing is not serious by banning the capital punishment and furthermore, in the essay “Death and Justice” by Edward Koch shows some good points why we need death penalty.

Answer 1

The death penalty and not Death penalty

if we don't have capital punishment and not a capital punishment

that they disagree with capital punishment and not a capital punishment

in a jail for the rest of their life and not for their life

They might actually enjoy it and not actually enjoy

and are still living in jail and not a jail

if we oficially say that all capital punishment and not a capital punishment

worst thing that could happen and not worth thing could

just going to jail and not a jail

take out the in front of all the words prison

who are the victim's family and not are victim's family

for the rest of their lives and not for their life

can be paid for only with their own life and not with only with their...

They have to understand that taking a person's life is a serious thing and not They have to understand taking somebody's life

We don't want to put the idea of killing is not serious by banning the capital punishment and furthermore bla bla bla is not a sentence... Try this instead:

It is not a good idea to give the impression, by banning capital punishment, that killing is not serious. Furthermore, the essay titled "Death and Justice" by Edward Koch points out even more reasons why we need the death penalty.

By the way, your essay is repetetive and doesn't really have many ideas on why capital punishment is a good idea. You are basically saying the same thing over and over again. If I were grading it, you wouldn't even pass...

Back to the drawing board.

Answer 2

I can't comment on the grammar, but Ed Koch is wrong on the facts. I can't imagine why you used this essay as your source. It was written in 1985, way before we started learning about the practical issues surrounding the death penalty and its serious flaws. Here are some verifiable and sourced facts about the death penalty. I hope that you will take the time to read them. This too, is long.

Re: Possibility of executing an innocent person
Over 120 people on death rows have been released with evidence of their innocence. Many had already served over 2 decades on death row. If we speed up the process we are bound to execute an innocent person. Once someone is executed the case is closed. If we execute an innocent person we are not likely to find that out and, also, the real criminal is still out there.

Re: DNA
DNA is available in no more than 10% of murder cases. It is not a miracle cure for sentencing innocent people to death. It’s human nature to make mistakes.

Re: Appeals
Our appeals system is designed to make sure that the trial was in accord with constitutional standards, not to second guess whether the defendant was actually innocent. It is very difficult to get evidence of innocence introduced before an appeals court.

Re: Deterrence
The death penalty isn’t a deterrent. Murder rates are actually higher in states with the death penalty than in states without it. Moreover, people who kill or commit other serious crimes do not think they will be caught (if they think at all.)

Re: cost
The death penalty costs far more than life in prison. The huge extra costs start to mount up even before the trial. There are more cost effective ways to prevent and control crime.

Re: Alternatives
48 states have life without parole on the books. It means what it says, is swift and sure and is rarely appealed. Being locked in a tiny cell for 23 hours a day, forever, is certainly no picnic.

Re: Who gets the death penalty
The death penalty isn’t reserved for the “worst of the worst,” but rather for defendants with the worst lawyers. When is the last time a wealthy person was sentenced to death, let alone executed??

Re: Victims families
The death penalty is very hard on victims’ families. They must relive their ordeal in the courts and the media. Life without parole is sure, swift and rarely appealed. Some victims families who support the death penalty in principal prefer life without parole because of how the death penalty affects families like theirs.

Opposing the death penalty doesn’t mean you condone brutal crimes or excuse people who commit them. According to a Gallup Poll, in 2006, 47% of all Americans prefer capital punishment while 48% prefer life without parole. Americans are learning the facts and making up their minds using common sense, not revenge.

Answer 3

i don't see any blaring mistakes. there are a few sentences i would reword (such as the first two, use a synonym for "kill" cause there's too many next to each other) but i'm just picky. you could mention how the appeals process is what makes the d.p. so much more expensive than life in prison, and the only (viable) solution is a cap on the number of appeals a convicted felon may have (three sounds fair)...also, the "inhumane" aspect could (and has) been addressed by the method by which we put people down; some methods are less humane than others. this sounds like a article summary, though, so maybe don't bother.

Answer 4

Your keys are on the porch table, the remote is on the kitchen table, and the glasses are on the counter.

Answer 5

top right check spelling!! just click it !!!